Black Poetry : Still at it- the musical

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  1. mysslez

    mysslez Member MEMBER

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    The prelude

    I don’t want you.
    How could I?
    You touched her.
    (My eyes are green ‘cuz I eat a lot of vegetables,
    it don’t have nothing to do with your new friend)
    I don’t want you.
    Or do I?
    I don’t need u.
    How could I?
    Anything you could do, you did.
    I left you alone.
    But can’t leave you alone….

    The act

    Climb on top of me and take me away from here.
    Take me from controlled desire to uncontrollable feeling.
    Your lick, your thrust, your caress.
    My willingness to be better than Vanessa del Rio.
    (I don’t wanna stop just because people walking by are watching us)
    I’m tighter than physically.
    Deeper than mentally.
    Warmer than the country.
    You……
    You’re deeper than……
    As deep as……
    Stop thinking.
    I’ll just enjoy the ride.
    You plunge with passion.
    I receive with purpose.
    Bare as the day we were born…….

    Intermission

    It was just like I remember it
    Except for you were with me….only.
    Only?
    Why can’t it be like it was….
    except for honest this time……
    (Faded pictures in a broken glass,
    like a mirror revealing what a woman is feeling)

    And again

    Comin’ back for more.
    It’s how we do.
    Flesh on flesh.
    Sweat on sweat.
    Drowning in the sea of iniquity.
    Redeemed by the saving grace of lust.
    (Go on and hit it, that’s what it’s made for)

    The end…for now

    Territorial scarring of your teeth on my neck
    My fingernails on your back
    Traces of me on your face
    Remnants of you….in me
    ****.
    Some things never change.
    (So many tears I cried, so much pain inside,
    but baby it ain’t over ‘til it’s over)



    -R.A.W.
    ori. September 28, 2004
    rev. September 28, 2004
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very deep mental play of feelings and heart
    the lost of inner love cascading out i feel ya deeply
    when the last dance is then u shall smile again from da past pain
    hold ya head up high! tyte write
     
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    i smile now.....i just happen to remember the feeling quite well as it seems to present itself once in a while...it's all good....i welcome it....gives me something to write about....thanx 4 tha luv, LEZ
     
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    great now dance ya way through da musical maze to light and see
    your shinning love that awaits u for the future happiness ...most welcome !
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sister this spelled deep in more ways
    than what I knew possible...
    love the way you broke it down
    into acts...of love, lust, passion and desire...
    very nice...the way you wove songs into the stanzas
    I was feeling the emotion in this piece...
    it billowed like wind with passion...
    Great writing...equals a great read!

    love this peace...poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Raw yes, in it's many elements like sage responded. I liked the matter of fact way you flowed with this. Glad this experience is behind you. Tight flow.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was lovly, if i remember straight, your an older member, this was hot keep up the work...
     
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    mysslez Member MEMBER

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    i'm 22

    LEZ
     
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