Black Poetry : Steps to goodbye

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Feb 9, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hurt
    Don’t hurt
    I tell you stop
    You tell me go
    Leave
    Don’t leave
    You turn me off
    I turn you on
    Go
    Don’t go
    I comfort you
    You abandon me
    Cry
    Don’t cry
    You desire me
    I ache for you
    Play
    Don’t play
    Wait a minute…
    Cut the mic
    This is nonsense
    Game over
    I’m finished
    Goodbye
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liked the way you posed these steps in detail, what a maze we go through sometimes.....
     
  3. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes we do. thanks
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i felt every stroke
    indeed what one's go through
    yet the true comfort is still ahead
    keep scribing
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is synchopated so well and is so real. love the way you dropped this down solid.
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i second everything gempis said...liked the syncopations...thanks
     
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