Black Poetry : Stay Strong, Son!

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  1. MsVeraisblessed

    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Son, Why's you tripping,
    whats you been smoke'n on.
    comin in heah yell'n and ****
    grab a chair and sit
    cause mama fix'n to rap to ya..
    Son, you ain't the only one walk'n
    round with the struggles on your back.
    Yes son, it because you's black.
    but don't cuss, dont yell, and dont holla at me
    thinking i ain't been out thar bfor

    Boy, look round ya what do you see.
    erryone is pushing for dem papers, try'n to eat,
    try'n to not to get beat
    in this man's society
    try'n stay out da mans cage.
    but you son,.keep on with yo rage
    you gone make sumbody pull it

    Hold ya head up son, wont be long,..
    gotta stay strong, dont let this society twist you.
    you know what eva you need i got it.
    Son, give me some love.
    cause baby, mama loves you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    holding on to mama's unchange hand and love will help in da war of struggle !!!
    yeah ! I'm feeling all of this here
     
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    Strong Black women make strong Black men.

    Solid!
     
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    Dear Sister Poet MsVeraisblessed,

    Wonderful. There is no greater love than the love a mother has for her child. Through your words I was not only able to hear the mother but I could also see and feel both mother and child. I could hear them breathe. I could smell bread baking in the oven. I could feel the rain outside.

    I love that you chose to use contemporary dialect to lend the piece an air of authenticity. It reminded me of works by Paul Laurence Dunbar.
    It's a wonderful feeling to read a piece that makes me reflect back to a master. Thank you for writing and sharing this piece. You dun good, Sis.
    Lovely, read.

    (smile)
     
  5. MsVeraisblessed

    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks you, Sis.TotalView, Bro 1poet, Bro, Rich...It means alot coming from you guys...All of the poetry writers on here are so good. If i keep read'n more of 'em, i surely will learn more.
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    I hear my Grandmother's words in this piece. Well done
     
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    Ohhhhhh Sister ... i love it !!! ... BRAVO ... :toast: :toast: :toast:

    i saw where you had asked about how to write poetry on the kitchen table ... but look at you !!!!!

    not everyone can write in ebonics ... and I LOVE EBONICS ... and to click on the title and read that .... :jumping: :jumping:

    do more please ... did i say i love EBONICS ??? ... oh gosh ... YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY !!!

    Great Work Sister ... and don't be tell'n nobodee you can't write poetry ... else i'm gonna hafta show 'em this! :love:

    Love You!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  8. MsVeraisblessed

    MsVeraisblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanky you Sis Destee,..I'm gett'n there...:)
     
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