Black Poetry : State of Her Perplexion (Collab THEONE & PLAINRYTHM)

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  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Plain:I missed you tomorrow, as much as I
    missed you today. Those images of you,
    flood back in my memory like a glass half
    empty.
    My loneliness is penetrating, for since
    you've gone, i've needed no-one, or
    nothing else.

    T ONE:My life is revolving around a memory
    Nothing seems as it use to be
    I don’t think the same about the days
    The nights have similar meaning
    Missing You!

    Lonliness is the cause of my reaction,
    Loss of love is the cause of my perplexion!

    Plain: your stuttering words are uttering
    the last time you said i love you,
    where did we go wrong love?
    the demons of time are smotherin my
    sweet angels of passion. your touch confuses me,
    is it love or are you foolin me? understand me!
    IM SO CONFUSED!

    T ONE:Baby foolin you would never be the case
    Love is our bondage my heart is yours
    My stuttering words are complexed with distance
    Not having you leaves my heart rythmless!

    Plain: I wouldn't stand to see your eyes flowin
    with passion, you THEONE i love, in love, with
    another love. I'm thirsty for your lies and
    your tantalising sweetness.
    Simple as it is to pretend i'm not
    lovin you, but my mind, my soul know the
    truth must be told!


    T ONE: I tangle with confusions, wrestle with pity
    Everydays like torture ignoring loves echoe
    Where we that wrong, could we happen again
    Ive lost the key to this lock
    And only want you to return
    Free me from insantity
    Confinement of not knowing, but knowing WE WERE ONE
    And with distance the urge grows stronger
    Bondage is my freedom
    rescue me!
    BABY.................... Im missing you!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was so hot tyte and awesome collab here y'all bang dis one to perfection
     
  3. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Good work from the both of you. It seems like we have a new team up in here and I do hope we can get more from you 2 again. :kickball:
     
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    diggin the vibe awesome scribing u 2
    keep droppin it

    hope to see yall tonight in chat
    poetry throw down 8pm EST
    www.destee.com/chat

    peace
    angel
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This flowed so genuinely, just like two folks having an intense conversation, ya know. Nothing perplexing about how well the two of you collaborated. Flow on you two.
     
  6. plainrhythm

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    thank you! but THEONE helped me on this one more than anything!

    props ONE. :hearts2:
     
  7. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this flow and it was tight
    but the one was with me lastnight
    just trippin all in all it was : :karate: (Kickin)
     
  8. Chastity

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    Yo tight collaboration...which resulted in the communication of your innermost.........Keep scribing :terrific:
     
  9. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks for the luv fam
    Plain is such an exceptional writer its hard to go wrong
     
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    This read like a diary :)
    from one stream of conciousness to anotha
    I couldnt help but be wrapped up in the makings of our newest combo
    :great: hope to read more :)
     
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