Black Poetry : Star Crossed

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Star crossed lovers like Romeo and Juliet
    So in tuned although we've never truely met
    Just a deep voice in my ear on the phone
    Just the intricate words I read when I'm alone
    Still like blood love pumps through my veins
    It's seen in the smile on my face when I mention your name
    Scribbled on my hand I labeled myself yours
    Because I am although you say that we can't be more
    The distance between us is only a matter of space
    And just another obstacle we are going to face
    We're kindred spirts, our souls destined to be one
    Like I always tell you, it'll work out in the long run
    Although we're star crossed, doomed never to meet
    Just the thought of you is really all I need​
     
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    Awww, now talk about a love poem...we can beat the odds, true love will rule. Just lovely poetess.
     
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    At each day break i see yo face
    soft warm and humble filled wit grace
    as the harvest moons rise and fall
    it's your voice in my mind that calls
    even as i speak we may never meet
    but the thoughts feels sweet and unique
    so i fall into da depth of my slumber
    smiling from the day past in ya honor

    This love piece had me feeling all fuzzy just beautifully done continue to express
     
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    Excellent write poet ...I enjoyed the read.
     
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    jus_dat_nice,

    In the run of day this one almost got away. Glad I found this piece, the problem is, I'm selfish with it, seems as though it was written for me, only! Now this is what I have a hard time with. And that is, how one piece can speak to so many, at one, that's deep! Tha's poetry! And this is feedback, that I now understand that is so necessary for the writer, please believe me when I say that. One last thing, It is as Destee has said, the poet desires to know how his/her work has reached the reader, so important!

     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm glad it made you feel "all fuzzy" and nice comeback. thanks for the love. :blowkiss:
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm so glad i reached you and thanks for the feedback. it's greatly appreciated.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well if you love him there's not much you can do, right? i'm determined to beat the odds. thanks for the love. :thanks:
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you. i try my best.
     
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    jus_dat_nice,

    Not a problem, great write, poet!

     
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