Black Short Stories : Standin on Da Corner!

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  1. beautifulblkw

    beautifulblkw Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    met this kid today!
    while waiting for da bus.
    he was smokin a L!
    shaking my head ...dis why we cant get ahead!
    Hey Sis! I know it look like I failed!
    I been tryin to keep a gig for sometime now!
    but the gigs round here don't keep my kind.
    I wasn't sure what he meant so I let him continue.
    I graduated from high school had a decent GPA.....
    didn't go to college my queen was in the family way.
    so I been bustin my hump tryin to keep food on the table...
    was late one day, baby was ill, told my boss he had to chill,
    if i don't take care of my family who will.
    He said I need a worker with less issues........
    So back on da grind bustin my hump ...
    work at a market got no complaints da costumers loved me.
    they thought I stole I told dem I wasn't no thief
    they said since we don't know you got to go........
    so here we go again back on da grind bustin my hump!....
    sis dats just a few days of my story.
    if I had da time I could talk all mornin...
    it's ok I think I overstand,
    I see what you mean and sorry for judgin
    I almost forgot......most gig don't keep hard workin Brothas.....
    Ya sis so I'm just a lil stressed....
    So I'm blow dis L before I go to Jail ...
    cause I'm bout to rob dis fool cause my lil girl need some food !!!
    hold up !!! hold up!!! hold up!!!
    I went in my pocket gave him my last...
    stealin aint da answer you need a gig that will last ...
    so finish ya L and talk to ya Queen
    I know she got ya back and wont let you fall
    so grind Together and stand tall......
    sis ! I cant take ya last....
    why not, you rather steel from dat man ......

    see I'm part of this group call Oppressed People and we grind together and put our minds together .....so you see my last is your beginning.......


    as I was gettin on da bus he blew da last of da smoke out his nose....
    gave me da fist up a walked away, he opened a door.......an said baby you was right I didnt do it ......
     
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    now that's what's up!

    I'm loving this piece right here!

    feeling this piece right here!

    flow on!
     
  3. beautifulblkw

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    Wow thank you much :qqb018:

    I'm new to this so your feedback and love is really important
     
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    Hey Sister BBW,
    Great flow, flow on, flow on. I look forward to reading more.
    Writing sometimes comes in spells, however we all have something to tell.
    Love & Blessings,
    Drea
     
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    Ms Drea Peace and love!!!!
    TY TY I think a new door has opened!!!!
     
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    Beautiful!

    BLACK WOMAN.
     
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    word up !
    this short line took me wit da reality truth
     
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    All I can say is THANK YOU much.......:wave:

    Peace and love
     
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    thank you Bro Rich,
    reality truth thats the only place it came from, I didn't even know that was there



    thank you much!!!!!!!!
    :qqb003:
     
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    This was outstanding. The way you posed this story...your words were so crisp the readers feel as though we were there. We truly don't know another's story unless we have been in their shoes. And the way the sister kept the brotha on the up and up by giving him he last....wow. I am speechless!
     
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