Black Poetry : Stalker

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Amun-Ra, May 2, 2001.

  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    An errant breeze rustled the curtain,
    but her sleep went undisturbed, undefiled
    and unaware of psychotic eyes roving.
    A star glint flash from cold tempered steel,
    suddenly disappeared along with the shadow.
    Broken anger toys lay scattered in his mind
    where the sluts of motherhood turned tricks.
    Crazy fire ignited the short fuse of maleness
    pushing him to cleanse her filthy slumber.
    A soft memory escaped her sleeping lips
    drifting into the dangerous air unknowing
    of fatal fires burning, churning just inches away.
    Now, the pounding began, throbbing his head,
    blurring his heated vision, blinding his eyes.
    Stainless steel and serrated edge flashed
    as the pressure in his head and pants grew.
    A dual penetration would ease the pain
    spinning his head with throbbing delirium.
    A barely audible click, like toys breaking brought
    bright light and the lonely eye of carbon steel
    letting him know his headache would soon end.


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  2. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very, very

    clear and chilling, and gripping and just plain excellent storytelling!

    thank you

    A
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well written... but who got shot?
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  4. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cain't Tell!

    Now that would give it all away

    Ra

    :jumping:
     
  5. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    intruder beware...

    my house isn't your house.

    Ra, as i've said many times before, you tell the story the way the story should be told. sick puppy got his just deserts...the way it should be.

    peace.
     
  6. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sick Puppies

    Never know who is sneaking around.

    Ra
     
  7. Jyntlbreez

    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what a suspenseful piece..Had me on the edge of my Chair!!
    yeah yu rocked this good!! Jyntl
     
  8. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa!!!!!

    Ra,

    Fella ya **** is just plain like that!!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  9. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dam a scary movie this poem is a great work of suspence, sex and violence.
    loved it, what a plot
    thanks
     
  10. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank y'all

    I was experimenting with mood--I thankyou for stopping past--Amun-Ra
     
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