Black Poetry : St ides

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by DA BROTHER LOVE, Sep 9, 2004.

  1. DA BROTHER LOVE

    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    St Ides, E&J…
    My two best friends on any day….
    On days when my mind is gone, and sadness dwells in my face…
    These liquid spirits help to chase the pain away.
    Allow me to leave this present reality, if only for awhile….
    Take me to a place where even pain makes me smile…
    My life aint nothing pretty, I seek not to brag about living my life in the dark….
    But how will I ever make out if nobody hears my desperate call…
    You see, I hold the same makings as that bum that you see sleeping in the park…
    I am his tragedy in the making, only about several years apart….
    My mother’s firstborn, my fathers second seed…
    Covered in prayers, born with a disease….
    Before I even learned to stand up, I began to fall
    A young black male born with an instinct for addiction, and a thing for alcohol
    Is it my fault that I have become the part of the underbelly of society?
    Do you think I do this on purpose? Just so people will like me?
    Is it merely a phase? Or just a young people’s thing? That’s highly unlikely…
    The same people that judged me never liked me, so **** society….
    To me liquor is that coach in the corner of the ring that keeps me fighting….
    A little sip of life that keeps me from dying…
    For you, alcohol is a high…
    For me, it’s a way to survive…
    Its how I kept my spirits up on those days that I wanted to die….
    So I will pay no attention to what anybody thinks if they haven’t lived my life…
    For the rest of my existence this hunger will always be at my core…
    They say it’s a hereditary curse, my father used to be the same way before I was born…
    Maybe the only way to stop it is to be suicidal…
    But that will never be, though my demons taunt me, I am determined to stay strong and fight them….
    Heaven help my future child that will be once again cursed into this vicious cycle…
     
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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!
    dis was phat funny how they mix
    flow head on now !!!
     
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    Hopefully those two buddies can be replaced by two less lethal. Poetically on point.
     
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    Your words were gut wrenching...
    those lines about being first of
    your mother, second seed of your father
    born with a disease...
    these words cried black tears of pain
    and sadness...coping with harsh realities
    there are few pieces that move me deeply
    this poem...whoa
    touched every fiber of my being
    not only was it exceptionally written...
    the emotion whirled through this piece
    like a storm cloud...producing torrential rains
    and it rained...inside of my soul as I read

    Poet...I'm lost in this piece
    Sage


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    Courageous effort here - *applause*
     
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    I've never heard addiction spelled out like this before. Props for personifying the pain for us all.
     
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    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im glad yall feeling the poem.... angelicsage.... you seemed to receive this piece in the perfect way.... i am delighted to see that you enjoyed it...
     
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    Da Brother Love ... when reading folk's poetry, it's never easy to tell if they are writing about themselves or some situation or experience that has touched their lives ... either way, for someone to be so very aware of their own situation ... as the person in this peace is ... gives me to know that they aren't as bad off as they think they are ... matter of fact, they are doing much better than most ... for most don't even realize when they've come close to their own edge ... i applaud you for this work and i applaud the main character in it ... and the child yet to be born, if they are as wise and insightful as their parent, they will do just fine! Great Work!

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    This was nice
    It crazy how something
    Are turned into a never
    Ending cycle yet
    We all have the determination
    To break it Much love Poet
     
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    this was some flow, flow on poet.
     
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