Black Poetry : ...****-spot...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LiLi, Oct 11, 2002.

  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tantrum of emptiness...
    first thought brought to fantasy erupts from inseam then amplification mounts luring mind to
    leaps
    and
    bounds
    of imaginative process

    lewd acts performed by swirls which dictate sole issuance
    into this world
    touch spaces learned as dirty places...
    disrupts lessons taught by ancestors and kind strangers
    fancy's tickled more by personal dilemma of if to strike first
    or just to
    ...hover

    senses flicker from cold to hot then back to cold
    (or is it hot? ****...i lost my train of thought...)
    pray for the memory of that snake that slithered then
    struck last
    ...aura more than seen
    heat rising from space buried below pulsing in it's
    wonton side smile
    gasping so softly first until that prayed for
    ...burst...
    satiation of hunger
    well...
    not really
    -simply an appetizer...


    ..."and something else" coming soon....)
     
  2. Queen_of_Spades

    Queen_of_Spades Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the way you teased the cerebrals with this joint. However, (and this is just a tiny suggestion) could you break some of the lines down a little bit more..I think it'd allowe for an even smoother flow. You are definitely dug.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wooooweeee LiLi u doing it up i see
     
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    Welcome Lili

    Nice Flow :)

    pd

    :wave:
     
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    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HEY YOU GUYS HAPPY MONDAY & THANK YOU!!!
     
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