Black Poetry : spot light for sixty seconds FLOW WITH ME IM REQUESTING WRITERS

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mistaliberator, Mar 29, 2004.

  1. mistaliberator

    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When I look around
    Im not surrounded by these expensive things
    Man i'm broke trying to live
    Welcome to the spot light
    10 seconds of fame up

    When I look around I can barley see because
    they help us to allow ourselves to fall for nothing
    But I still continue to smoke
    Like thats really going to help me get through this
    "Yeah Right"
    Welcome to the spotlight
    2o seconds of fame up

    When I look around
    I hear the guns pop
    And I see the block is hot
    And they bragg on what they got
    But today I must really be deaf
    because just like today and like any other ordinary day
    I walked right in the middle of the chaos
    Blind as I may pretend to be
    I cant blame it on the money
    may be my cd
    or my reputation
    Lets be honest im about my self
    So I walk on offering none of my self
    I cant here the babies crying for help
    I call my sistas bitche$
    But I didnt help them untie theirselves
    I was on the block but I cant see my brothas begging for death
    Welcome to the spotlight
    30 seconds of fame up
    **** I cant blame them I blame us
    holding on to anything
    I never speak on how the chains sound
    after the brains get blown
    and the matrix soon reloads
    on site
    men die chasing the spotlight
    it aint right
    but I witness it live on national tv and put it on CD
    Mista maybe considered a hater now
    but I cant tell
    yall floss so loud
    style so loud
    dress so loud
    I know fake from two miles away hidden inbetween the seems of your broken dreams
    that **** wont sell in my cell
    it dont fit me well cant let yall lead me to hell
    forget the chains I wont the crown
    forget the name Icherish my life
    forget the ground I want the throne
    these thoughts drift on
    and how I keep on its no mystery
    you dont know history
    we didnt do this
    where is the blueprint when we need it
    yall a loop and bass bump and beat it
    but you cant feed
    and
    If its all about rap then its not needed
    its all about your name huh
    I plan to change the game up
    pollute the world up with this poetic blues
    freeze dont move you loose
    lets take the teachers back to school
    had the clues
    didnt make moves
    60 seconds of fame up
    Welcome to the spot light.................
    You think

    ps( I tried my hardest to finish this it just didnt connect but I said everything I wanted to say it just didnt feel right for some reasons Im waiting for it to come again) so please hold on.........
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what seem a block is only the myth
    this was well done and needed to be placed
    coz so many live in the fame of 20 second
    spotlight
    sometime i can't see three steps away
    Thankz for dis
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    writers block
    naw
    look within and release
    its there it never leaves
    nice drop
    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. Earthly Allure

    Earthly Allure Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree with Rich and Angel. This acheived exactly what it was you wanted it to achieve. God bless.
    ~Earthly Allure
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nope, your spotlight is infinite...write some more.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you are flow
    feeling you on this
    keep it coming
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  7. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was nice. Good job. Writer's block
    I think maybe thatyou wrote what you set out to
    say or at least that is the vibe I get. :spin:
     
  8. mistaliberator

    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    help me

    I just got a strange felling about this one may be its a sign that i may need help to finish this
     
  9. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tyte drop
    not sure what you mean by didn't flow
    the whole read was wonderful and straight forward and so freaking real.

    loved it. :spin:
     
  10. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    REALITY

    real real real real real what else can I say I LOVED IT lol :wink:
     
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