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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Caesarlee31, Aug 14, 2004.

  1. Caesarlee31

    Caesarlee31 Active Member MEMBER

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    Get up!
    Put your clothes back on.
    I wanted to uncover soul,
    and let you strip away mind.
    this time the perversion is
    I want 2 be with U
    as a friend
    to know you metaphysically speaking

    get up!
    the thought of you confuses me,
    stupefies, and denies me access to solace.
    Put your clothes back on!
    so I can think and contemplate you.
    I think that I think too much of you.
    lying, lain there naked
    like destiny and devotion
    and I want you to put your clothes on
    and
    and
    and nothing!
    (lost) :spinstar:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ya on a roll i see very nicely done poet

    keep in mind to get your membership here at destee.com
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    this was nice scribing...
     
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    Wanting to see even more, into another's soul, I'm feeling this.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    wow...i like it..
    the first piece i have read of yours. (i go eagerly to the next now)
    really nice...i feel the dilemma
     
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    Love the twist in this piece...
    made me think of that joint
    we don't have to take our clothes
    off to have a good time...
    the physical can often cheapen
    the possibilities of a wonderful
    beginning...

    feeling this peace...
    Nice work poet!
     
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    again...interesting piece...change of mindset
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Caesarlee31

    You really cared for her...didn't you? :D

    I feel you not wanting to make it just a sexual thing. But, don't do that too many times. The person might leave thinking they're unwanted/undesired. Fool around a lil bit. :lol:

    :thanks: for sharing a moment of enlightenment with us.

    :toast:
     
  9. Caesarlee31

    Caesarlee31 Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks, I'm looking forward to reading and writing for you again
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh, that was interesting. Sometimes what's on the inside is much more important than the outside.. Tight scribe.
     
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