Black Poetry : Spanish Dancer

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  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the smoky darkness, my features were hidden
    except for the amber glow of chain smoked cigarettes
    and the spit-shined toes of hand-tooled leather slip-ons.
    Jose Quervo, a solitary shot glass and me,
    all sit empty at the table, waiting for my Spanish dancer.

    A cone of smoke streaked incandescence revealed
    a small stage waiting to feel the soft stroke of smooth slippers.
    A guitar strummed the air and she appeared,
    shoulders bare, arms diamond gracefully over her head.
    Jet hair pulled tight, her lids snapped open beaming black heat.

    Beneath the flared and split carmine sheath,
    smooth copper began to flow rhythmically, wantonly.
    A flash red swirls, floats, stirs the warm strings and my blood,
    lifting my heart, quaking my soul, freeing my passion.
    Quervo numbness flees, ashamed and embarrassed
    as onyx eyes lock to mine, puncturing my pain
    releasing it in a swirl of crimson color and clicking castanets
    as my ardor awaits patiently, for my Spanish dancer.

    :heart:
     
  2. GYPSYMAN

    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    VIVID !!

    Bro. Amun Ra this piece is tight ...excellent execution of mood creation...I Quote you...

    her lids snapped open beaming black heat....
    Spanish Dancer....Amun Ra

    ..this line alone brought me into the room with your vision,
    face to face and soul to soul with her...in my minds eye...she was right there, music and sounds of her footsteps along with the smoky room...

    EXCELLENT WORK !!!

    On A Continuous Journey
    GYPSYMAN
     
  3. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is one

    of my favorites Ra! You always take the reader, position us behind your eyes to see from your perspective....you make us feel your pulse....as we wait patiently...


    Bravo!

    Alyce
     
  4. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    24 years ago, in Little Havana, that was my Cuban girlfriend Carmen. There's a story there, but I haven't ever written about it except for this piece.

    Ra

    :crying:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Ra.....

    MAN ITS BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN
    AS I FELT I WAS THERE IN THE
    SAME ROOM ON THE SAME FLOOR

    DES PIECE DANCE IN MY MIND

    WRITE DA STORY!!
    MORE MORE MORE !!:) :D
     
  6. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks!

    I wish I could say more on this one--it's personal--Ra
     
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    Ra...

    Cuando escrito como si....Carmen es muy bonita

    An excellent piece poet....such a vivid picture painted. I felt
    the dance of her 'sexy' clicking at her heels.

    *flamenco*


    :heart:
     
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