Black Poetry : Southern Blindfold

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    Imagine what all that hate
    has done to him.
    His conscience; beaten and bruised;
    not easily recognized,
    and yearning to pluc-k out
    it's own stubborn eyes;

    Imagine white-hot anger,
    tempered only by perverted notions
    of righteousness and compassion;
    flowing from shame;
    Impetuously praying
    by the light of the Devil's Flame.

    Imagine us, here, now;
    staring direct and fierce;
    unflinching and sober;
    tugging the strings that hold,
    his southern blindfold.
     
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    great piece ........felin all of it too
     
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    Wow!....Now, THIS one reminded me of the song "Strange Fruit."

    However, I loved the whole; and you have a very distinct voice in your writings.

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    And THIS part was my FAVORITE!

    Your phrasing is succinct but says so much and speaks so loudly!
     
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    skuderjaymes - I found this a very provocative and thoughtful. When you tug on a man's blindfold that he's used as protection all his life, you take a chance he'll fight back. But what's enlightenment if you don't look into the light. I hear you skuderj. Liked this indeed. Namyh
     
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    Wow....

    I felt the vibe from beginning to end...

    Very poignant...SkuderJames!



    e:heart:
     
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    thats interesting.. I like the the connection to "the light"..
    that adds a powerful visual element.. I may pursue that in
    a separate piece. anyway, that blindfold is weaved out of
    the human need to rationalize in order to cope with the
    reality of what they had become.. for bread, for land, for
    status.. Look at what they had made themselves into.
    it's crazy..
     
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    James,

    I have been visiting with this piece for over a year. The subject matter is interesting and well thought out but what has me truly riveted it this. To this day I can't decide who I choose to believe the subject to be. Is he an oppressor or a man oppressed? I can read it either way and often do. I can see either trying to survive behind their southern blindfolds, for anger and shame can be established in either or both.

    The last stanza is intriguing because now you have placed the subject's unmasking in the readers hands.

    Now wondering who it is I'm "staring direct and fierce; unflinching and sober;" at?

    Rhetorical question. I like from day to day tugging on those strings finding a different man there.
     
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    skuderjaymes...I did not realise you wrote poetry..very good..keep it up. :wave:
     
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    ..been a poet all of my life.. just sidetracked from time to time to time..
     
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    Continue to enlighten... u have helped me see some things differently that has troubled me.

    Distinguishing the difference to see the greater factors in an ongoing confusion of many of our interactive lives.
     
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