Quiet Poetry Lounge : Soul Shivers at Common Ground

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  1. KentuckianKween

    KentuckianKween Active Member MEMBER

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    Soul Shivers at Common Ground


    We sat and slept together
    as we waited for her to take the stage.

    I told him to sit beside me
    between my bare skin and the window
    to keep me warm,
    and when he did started a four-alarm
    somewhere in my flame-retardant soul.
    With my hand on his,
    I traced my initial lightly on his thumb,
    west to east,
    tip to base.
    Even with him sitting beside me,
    i could feel the brisk night air
    wrap itself around me
    and i shivered.
    My leg still twitches
    in the spot where he traced his silent sonnet,
    unintelligible words in a circle on my thigh
    in some salty, sultry language
    of lovers past and lovers to be.
    When it was over,
    he touched me
    he shook me
    and I leapt from my dream world to his.
    His face was the first I saw
    and I shivered as he moved away from me.
    We rose in unison
    and weaved our way through
    noisy conversations,
    clanking plates,
    cigarette spirits,
    and java beans.
    He gave me his jacket before we stepped outside
    to protect me from the breeze,
    to keep me from shivering.
    We walked all the way
    to the edge of the earth
    far from the sun
    and i shivered as the faceless night sky
    whispered its secrets to my cinnamon shell.
    We parted and i found my way
    safely back to Common Ground.
    I stepped inside
    and left the chilly spirits behind me.
    I sat serenely
    and there in the warmth,
    I shivered...

    but not because i was cold.




    peace, yall...
     
  2. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this

    ish is deep, my sista! Thoroughly wrapped me up inside your imagery........Love the way you weave sensuality through every verse...... So many wonders you showed me here....

    and I shiver...."but not because I'm cold"

    **** sis!

    speak to me early and often!

    a
     
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    Nice...Very Nice....

    I enjoyed the read...You words were definitely engaging...
     
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    nice read...

    as the river flow...so do you.

    do whatcha do, poetess.
     
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    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the KentuckianKween

    must hold her throne somewhere in the land of poetia--

    (*leaping gingerly away from this radioACTIVE HOTNESSS!!!!)

    how can this not be at the top of the page!


    *becomes anti-matter in the night that surrounds...*
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kween

    I shivered...

    but not because i was cold but because this was on point. I've been absent for a while so to you I extend a deep heartfelt welcome. Looking foward to reading more of you work sis.



    One
     
  7. dnommo

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    entering fromt he garden of serenity

    excellent scribe from the title to the end. you've penned this one well and i look froward to reading more...

    ***returning to the garden of serenity***
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    Kween

    you got me shivering

    in Da North

    Girl


    Peace from Da Streets
     
  9. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    quite nyce, dear poetess. lovin' this piece heyah...yes, indeed.
     
  10. KentuckianKween

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    much luv to each and all for readin' and respondin...

    yall make me smile :D <--


    peace, peeplins....
     
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