Quiet Poetry Lounge : sorry - song poem 160

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jul 14, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I'm sorry i couldn't show you how I feel
    let myself be real - let myself be free
    open up and give you
    ME

    feared of being hurt - doing wrong- being had
    scared and still I have'nt had a chance to be
    knowing what I'm doing
    understanding it's ruining
    WE

    Sorry, couldn't let myself be free - give you part of me
    you scared to step...
    cause you don't know me
    me not knowing you and I
    couldn't show you how I feel- couldn't let myself be real
    couldn't relax enough inside, show you all the pride
    that you care about
    Me

    couldn't relax myself and see How I was messing up the
    WE
    couldn't give you all I've got - couldn't show you all the hot
    needed ways to say oh yes..couldn't pass the test
    i couldn't let myself be free
    couldn't help us make
    WE
    YOU & ME
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we all take a step back
    not letting self go be real so the other
    can feel and make it a we the u and me
    from da heart ya scribing heavy flow on !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What fear can do. Wanting to show the best in all honesty, but pulling away, weakening the bond. I loved the way this was posed, the rhythm of the flow so matches the uncertainty that lies within.
     
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    I have been here too, my friend. This is beautifully posed.
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    it's amazing..so many of us have huh?
    thanks for support
     
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    Deepy,

    Fear in loving for most of us is commonplace. Breaking down your barriers is really a hard thing to do, and can only be done when you are comfortable to do so. Thank you for sharing this. I can relate. :look:
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet, You Are!

    all i can say is you truly know
    how to turn a phrase...
    i'm always looking forward to
    and pleased with your next line...

    you are sincerely...deep
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heart touching peace...
    the fear of letting go
    and learning to let
    love take hold...

    a neverending saga...
    I so feel you...
    Tyte scribe
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    seems we've all been there huh
    thanks angelic....
     
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