Black Poetry : Sorry excuse for a title

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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Waters plunge
    Like waves.
    Articulate words,
    Heavy and bold, underline her.
    Mindful show off,
    You ignite my feelings.

    These walls seem to shrink
    I need you like subject and predicate,
    Life and death,
    Like the horizontal line
    Crossing the "l" we need you.
    Yet, somehow, you sicken me.
    Please arouse someone else
    With your adolescent pen strokes,
    They don't move me.
    Sing your deceitful lullaby
    Alone,
    Show off.

    Feelings don't bother you,
    I can tell.
    Her mouth has been leaking
    How about you seal it tight.
    I will go now,
    The tunes are breaking
    Vases, quickly,
    Unfasten her lips
    They seem to have overthrown her
    So let it be
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Love and Hate....

    Come hither...get the hell on.

    I feel you on that one.

    ...when the attraction is too hot to handle and too cold to hold.

    Nice one, poet.

    Keep scribin'.

    :D
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HaHaHaHa
    You bout to hold something!!!!
    I hope it is only a grudge.!!
    Yeah we can get lost in the Back and Forth motions
    N it always comes a time when we are like..."just forget it"
    Lol...Showed the feelings
    :welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so often the twist of moves can be a jungle book
    and get it quite it ...........message well on point
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How does one title a piece that so creatively inks the ebb and flow that overwhelms us? Not sure, but I am sure that I enjoyed the way you structured this piece poet.
     
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    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    VERY NICE

    I REALLY APPERCIATE YOUR WORK KEEP ON WRITING
     
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    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes and that's exactly what it is! it's a tough world out there....lol...get with it or get gone....lol

    enjoy ur day...stay positive!
     
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    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks mucho!....and i don't know how it happens; whatever the reason, it works ....

    take care!

    stay positive
     
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    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You...

    everyone....u are awesome....i appreciate your response :)
     
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