Quiet Poetry Lounge : Sorrows

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  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wish I was a drinking woman
    Numbing my sorrows with gin
    The clear burning liquid
    Oozing down my throat
    Erasing the days pain
    From my memory
    Oh, I wish I was a singing woman
    Pick up my tool and pick
    The blues
    Wailing, crying, screaming, too
    Call and response
    And I'll have paid my dues
    Wish I was a dancing girl
    Twirling in the rainbows
    Only I can see
    Tapdancing on the grave of
    Heartache
    Chanting the childhood spells
    That chase away the Devil's lure
    Singing, swinging
    Laughing woman
    Transformed into tear streaked mess
    Tears in my iced tea
    Lipstick on my dress
    With my friend Sorrow
    Sitting on my left
     
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    Poet....you laid this out from A to Z, trying to chase those blues away by taking the mind somewhere else. I enjoyed this potent flow. Wonderful!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what seem heavy will become lighter hold on to faith
    da sorrow will smile after a while trust in him .
     
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    you laid this....
    keep your faith..i been down this road..
    and the sun will shine...flow it and release it..
    Trust in your faith....

    Peace and love
    Angel
     
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    yeah i felt like that before too.... but maybe your way chasing away the blues is supposed to be through writing poetry.... good job tho
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    fabulous...fabulous...
    a song...rich in emotions...everywhicha way..chasing them blues
    loved it..
     
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    WOAH!!! Now I can relate to this poem on so many levels. Seems like very where I look, sorrow is creeping past me. This is poetry. Nice work! :D
     
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    Very smooth. I feel you on that one. Hurting lasts longer than we won't to most of the time doesn't it.
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow! I didn't expect so many responses so quickly to this one. Just a little something I threw together when I was feeling down. Thank you for showing me love.
     
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    Oh girl, this is CLASSIC. Just beautiful from top to bottom. I am in awe.
     
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