Black Poetry : Song of Exctasy...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is another song i wrote called "Upendi". Upendi is Swahili for love and i liked the word so i interacted it with my song. Of course this doesn't flow and ryhme as well as a poem but again its the message that counts...tell me what you think!




    VERSE 1:

    i'm shiverin'
    i'm shakin'
    and last night remains in my head
    its mornin'
    your sleepin'
    and holdin' me oh so gently
    oh i feel like
    like a new woman
    cuz last night you captured my soul
    and i'm grateful that you are the first i opened to


    CHORUS:

    We made upendi
    all night long
    upendi
    thats why i'm singin' this song
    upendi
    oh it felt so good
    upendi


    VERSE 2:

    It started with one kiss
    that led straight to heaven
    i'm soarin'
    while your explorin'
    and waves of exctasy come over me
    oh i never
    i never noticed
    how much i love you
    and you've shown me
    a new way
    and to see like from a different view


    HOOK:

    cuz it felt like silk was overcomin' my body
    love is runnin' through my soul
    joy is burstin' all over me
    givin' me that feelin' of exctasy


    (back to the chorus a couple of times)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!! your skillz are amazing
    this was very very nicely written
    when it hit and become #1
    remember ya brutha $$RICH$$
    dis will go somewhere what u waiting on !?
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwwww thank you soooo much...its good to hear good comments...i was kinda scared to post this...but u made me a lot more confident:) i hope if i ever get famous, this song does go somewhere.....i'm prayin hard...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    it will in the right handz
    ur gift is ready to take off
    good Luck ......i want a sign CD k.
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol, ok you'll get a signed cd...and thanks for the encouragement :)
     
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    This is really really beautiful and as lovely as the lovely woman who wrote it...........I agree with $$Rich$$ this song if put into the right hands will go somewhere.......especially overseas.......man...thrown in some soft female harmony in the background and a smooth drum rhythm..............I ready to by me a copy now!!!!!!!!....................I like it........
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

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    awwwwww thanks so much, thats so sweet....well if i do get famous make sure u do buy a copy!:)
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :( nobody else wants to read?....
     
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    I read, I liked!!!
    got me contemplating
    the melody and what not!
    Skillz fo' real!
    Peace to ya!
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

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    thanks alot :)
     
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