Black Poetry : Sometimes

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  1. captflash

    captflash Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes I wonder what happened to me.
    I step from the shower the truth’s there to see.
    It’s frightening, so scary, Mr. Mirror doesn’t lie.
    Can I be this ruined? Has life passed me by?

    My face, God it’s puffy, my color so ruddy.
    The veins on my cheeks, tiny lines reddish ugly.
    They’re roadmaps to nowhere, to a nothing I fear.
    For when nothing is mine there’s no laughter just tears.

    Look! My hair when it’s wet is dark like before.
    But the towel makes it dry now its gray gives me more
    of a reason to wonder what happened to me.
    Is this growing old? Is this truth I won’t see?

    Now my old green eyes stare back with reproach.
    Once they sparkled with challenge, spirit and hope.
    Now they’re hooded, so tired. Could this be defeat?
    I know not, I hope not, for my heart it still beats.

    It screams as it beats, with a cry to be known.
    It demands to be nurtured, to become fully grown.
    For this heart is a seedbed, the loam of my soul
    and the spirit can’t ripen when time seeks its toll.

    As the towel dries my body I see fish belly white.
    My stomach protrudes, my God what a sight.
    I question. I marvel. What happened to me?
    Has time lost this child and his dreams that would be?

    Ah well what the hell the world turns with no key.
    And perhaps in the end it’s much better for me.
    To know of the truth this mirror gives with no glee.
    To stare at my image, lean closer to see.

    I’ll whisper my question --- Again? --- Hopefully?
    Mr. Mirror won’t you tell me --- What happened to me?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!! self life before one own eyes
    mirror mirror on da wall
    can dis be
    is dis all

    in reply ...........u r who u be yes it's true what u see
    one's self of great age yet ya lovin heart not cage

    I loved dis piece.......tell me more.
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed this piece.
    As difficult as it must be at times
    I'm sure we all notice changes
    the mean mirror makes us witness. :D


    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
  4. captflash

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    Thanks very much for your time and comments, cocobutterskyn, your enjoy of the piece is a wonderful reward.
     
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    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Capt... remarkable work. Very honest (like that pesky mirror) and introspective. Wonderful!
     
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    Captflash...

    Sometimes....
    that mirror lies..well maybe a lil'.:lol:

    I love this honest look
    at the noticeable changes
    age...produces.


    Epiphany :heart:
     
  7. captflash

    captflash Member MEMBER

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    Thanks very much to Epiphany and MsBerry_98 for your kind comments. I sincerely appreciate your taking the time to express your thoughts.
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Capt,

    Man, you layed it down here from the looking glass perspective!!!

    Bravo poet!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    Thanks GQ. I appreciate your time and comments very much.
     
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