Black Poetry : sometimes.....we see it comin

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  1. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes…We see it Comin….?

    All the problems
    Cousin
    We wasn’t meant to be
    It’s sad to say
    I wish
    I could take back
    Everything I say
    Said, got me sicker than Sudafed
    Trying to get bread
    We wasn’t getting fed

    In our relationship
    Course there was argu
    Always wondering what u searching
    Is it something more than me
    R u?
    Arguable, arguably I treated you less
    Than the best
    That happened to me
    Now, gotta make a move
    I see
    We just won’t make it

    I can’t see
    No
    We couldn’t even forecast our storm
    So we droughted
    Maybe….
    If I wouldn’t have doubted
    Count it
    Arguments
    Things said
    **** we bled
    Overdue period

    Us.
    Period

    Is that the end of the sentence?
    Is the paragraph over?
    Since I chipped shoulders
    Maybe you need somethin’
    More than
    A little more than me
    Like time and more inquisitive sensitivity
    Maybe a love
    Brighter
    Shine more vividly
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes this...
    and it was fo sho on point...
    at times we do but thats we ya go blind...
    nice write...
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, this is raw and honest with a great flow
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well said love the expression of heart here
    man tyte flow
     
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    Sometimes it's hard to see the drama we add to our own mix. Very insightful, and you posed it so well.
     
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