Black Poetry : sometimes nothing is enough

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  1. blakrok

    blakrok Member MEMBER

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    seduction - that’s it in word.

    the thought feeling of secret smiles, warm fingertips, softly parted lips,
    speaking mystery to my uncomprehending center
    “touching me in places I didn’t even know I had”

    screaming my name through

    silence
    and softness
    and whispers
    and breezes
    and

    nothing

    the sensuality of nothing
    you look nothing into my eyes,
    hiding behind the something never spoken,
    purely vicarious thrills,
    never consummated,
    often misinterpreted as love
    or something close to it but nothing

    that is all it is
    and I add my nothing to your nothing
    and you breath your nothing in my mouth
    and my lungs fill with your nothing
    and I cry my nothing into your hair
    and you taste my nothing on your lips
    and I wipe my nothing from your eyes
    and you kiss my nothing away
    and I feel nothing because

    You seduced me with nothing.

    No look
    no touch
    no smile
    yet here I lie
    drenched in nothing
    breathing nothing
    since it is nothing
    hiding behind the something that I find that you fear
    that I avoid and we chase to escape from
    into nothing
     
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    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NICE

    Blakrok,
    I was seduced by this word play!! Nice job and good flow

    Be Blessed
    Queen
     
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    blakrok Member MEMBER

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    much thanks to you queen. i appreciate the appreciation!
    peace
    blackrok
     
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    blakrok......u came correct and to a point dis was on hit !
    flow head on poet !
     
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    blakrok Member MEMBER

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    mad props to those of you who came before and made a brotha feel like fam...giving thanks...
    peace
     
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    seems like this nothing is something yet can't seem to establish when the transition was made .... is it even important all u know is it's more than what u had ( enough ) and just the right amount of what u need..... continue on ....... to have nothing
     
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    as always... beautifully written. :spinstar:
     
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    blakrok

    this peace here was soo on point...had me thinkin you were vibin' with my mind...it's a serious situation to be seduced by nothing.

    ****...this is a hit!

    Aminata
     
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    blakrok Member MEMBER

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    thank you all for giving me such positive feedback...truly, this is the first time i have posted anything online before and your words are real real encouragement...thank you from the depths...
    wildflower7, you are an angel....lol
    peace
     
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    yes this was reall good

    No look
    no touch
    no smile
    yet here I lie
    drenched in nothing
    breathing nothing
    since it is nothing
    hiding behind the something that I find that you fear
    that I avoid and we chase to escape from
    into nothing

    liked that the best

    keep um comin
     
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