Black Poetry : Something

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Loveall20, Jul 3, 2003.

  1. Loveall20

    Loveall20 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WITH EACH HOUR,
    THE AGONY BRINGS ABOUT MY DEMISE,
    LIKE LIFE, WITH NO BREATH, KEEPS ME
    PANTING, WITH HOPES OF AIR TO FIND.
    EYES FLOODED WITH SALTY WATER FROM INSIDE,
    HEARING FANITLY, THE WORDS SPOKEN SO CALLOUSLY GOODBYE.
    BUT I KNOW IN YOUR HEART YOU CRYED,
    REFUSE TO LET ME SEE THE PAIN,INSIDE ASHAMED
    THAT YOU LOVED ME, LIKE I LOVED THEE.
    ARE RELATIONSHIP NOT SO COMPLEX, BECAUSE I FELT
    YOUR WILL TO PERSERVE THOUGH IT, BUT YOU DID NOT DO IT.
    NOW I'M LEFT CONFUSED, CAUSE I'VE FOUGHT SO HARD,
    WITH BRUSIES TO PROVE IT.SERINITY HAS NOT COME TO ME,
    YET I WAIT FOR WHAT I KNOW CANNOT ARREST ME,
    YOUR ACTIONS PERPLEXING, A FOOL TO SIT REMINCING,
    THINKING MY HERO WOULD COME BACK AND PROTECT ME.
    I'M PATHATIC, MY HEART ACHES, MY EYES CRY, MY SOUL
    IS DIEING, SO THERE IS NO DENYING, I'M SICK WITHOUT YOU.
    WHAT SPOT IN THIS WORLD YOU OCCUPY,
    IS THERE ANOTHER THAT YOU LOVE MORE THAN I?
    O JUST TO SEE YOUR FACE,
    COULD BRING CONTENTMENT.
    WON'T BANISH ANGUISH, BUT SURELY COMFORT IT.
    STOP WITH YOU SELFISHNESS, YOU BOKE MY HEART,
    NOW YOU MEND IT, TOOK IT LIKE A BANDIT,
    HOW A LOVE YOU COULD JUST LEAVE STRANDED.
    I'M SO WEAK, MY LIFE FORCE IS DRAINED
    IT FEELS IMPOSSIBLE TO CONTINUE THIS WAY.
    I RECONIZE YOUR REASONS, WE FOUGHT SO HARD
    FOR LOVE, AND THE FIGHT EVEN SOMETIMES LEFT ME TO
    READY TO GIVE UP, BUT I LOOKED AT WHAT WAS
    REAL THOUGH WHAT WAS FAKE SEEM TANGIBLE,
    IT MAKES ME ENRAGED THAT DEEP DOWN YOUR ACTIONS
    ARE UNDERSTANDABLE.
    BUT I CAN'T FEEL ALRIGHT, CAUSE WITHDRAWL LEAVES
    ME SUFFERING, SO I WAIT HERE CRYING,
    JUST SIT HERE WAITNG....... FOR SOMETHING.
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I meant to say, before I hit the enter.

    I like your style of writing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    love is a mystery
    love is pain
    love is joy all da same
    love can be blind
    it can be warm
    u can't see it
    yet it's felt
    i feel u scribe deeply , let da emotions flow say it , let it all out
    intently i'm listening .......
     
  5. Poetic Justice

    Poetic Justice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the way you flow, i like the sense of time being enjoyed and emersed when i read your poem.
    I am getting a real cool vibe from you, you are much welcome here.
    Great poem!
     
  6. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel your pain so deeply on this..everyday I live with not understanding the reason she left..but everyday I become stronger in going on with my life.
     
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