Black Poetry : Something whooshed....

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Something whooshed...

    On a planet, in a country, in a state, in a town,
    on a street where a lampost shines
    and the houses, very warm, quiet dreamers in their sleep
    like a hush after church bell chimes.

    Something whooshed...on the wind in the distance.
    Something galloped in the lime moonlight
    -and its wings cut the air
    -into slices of Fear
    which it tossed in the night with delight.

    And I shivered with a tremble and began to disassemble
    with the fright now fused to my bones.
    -Slices landed on the rooftops,
    -slid across the treetops
    and fell down to cartop domes.

    Out my bed, 'cross the floor, thru a window did I spy
    down the street from that lamp lurking light,
    came an eerie fog creeping, 'cross the land was it seeping,
    into beds and blankets and the sleepers of the night.

    Then the church bell rang! Clang! Clang!
    The church bell rang! Clang! Clang!

    In its cloud came the hoofbeats thumping like heartbeats
    pulsing to a blood-beat time,
    -as the whoosh of its wing flaps
    -turned cold my blood saps
    freezing in the vessels of my mind.

    Fog seeped at a fast creep crossing onto my street's
    curb over lawn, more and more
    -while sliding past the fireplace,
    -creeping up the staircase,
    thumping down the hall to my door.

    Some human headed hoofed thing, half bull-half wing,
    eyes froze in fire-wreathed flames,
    -just reached out from the mist,
    -grabbed me by my arm and wrist
    and pulled me, screaming, in the fog in pain.

    I jolted from this nightmare, awake and free of frightmares,
    gasping for some air or wake-up push.
    -Ran to my window just to breathe.
    -The night air filled my lungs with ease
    when eyes and head turned left.....……..and Something whooshed

    Namyh
     
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    Something whooshed by me too!...smiles. Your descriptive elements were well written and either this was a nightmare or you need to put the bible down. Either way, your flow was on point!
     
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    good thing i read this in the sunlight...

    chills.
     
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    wow

    so descriptive

    man felt like i was there

    the amazing thing that this all probably took place within 1.5 seconds

    broken down into infinity you know where time almost stands still

    then when i read your last line

    it made it even more clear to me

    peace
     
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    O my goodness glad it was morning so i could see....wow ya pen hot
     
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    Keita - It was a nightmare all the way and I wrote it so the reader could enjoy it too (lol). Glad the flow was on point and made you smile. Maybe I’ll try a “daydream” next time. Thanks Keita. Namyh
     
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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!

    Harry Hyman,

    Very good, Harry, very good!

     
  8. Harry Hyman

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    baller - Maybe it is indeed better to read nightmare terrors in the light of day where they grab only half of one’s fear. I worry about after evening in the night when they come back to get the other half.LOL So very glad you enjoyed Baller. Thanks for your words. Namyh
     
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    Your word choice is amazing, the way you describe these eerie scenes, puts us right in the thick of it. Once again, well done poet.
     
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    Da Street So’ja – Just when you thought it was safe to ride on the waters of sleep, you find yourself wet and swimming with the sharks of nightmares that Whoosh. It’s enuf to make the eyes and head turn completely around. Thanks So’ja. Namyh

    Rich - I’m also glad it’s morning so you can see. But if you turn your eyes and head and something whooshes, please let us know. Thanks for your hot words. Namyh
     
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