Quiet Poetry Lounge : Something Simple...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by tashatoya, Dec 23, 2004.

  1. tashatoya

    tashatoya Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You...See you, bring me back to life
    Because before there was a you and i
    Things weren't right, they were as unhappy
    As they could ever seem to be
    Days were cold and nights were hot because
    I was confused on what to do next
    Like a chesspeice waiting on its move
    Ready to say checkmate but not knowing
    Where to go while my opponet was the world
    With its everyday problems like not being
    Able to pay the bills, watching the drug dealers
    Making their sells on the corner
    As if i was watching a low-budget movie,
    But then you came along, and moved me
    To a state of mind where i haven't been
    In so long... Tranquility, Love, Tranquility, Love
    You...See you, Bring me back to life
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how deep I feel u here very well said
     
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    Simply lovely, I particularly liked the metaphor using the chesspiece. Flow on poet.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He simply appeared...and the life you thought was gone, ...reappeared.
    wonderful piece, you flowed it well poet.
     
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    Some of the most beautiful things are the simple ones - like this piece.
     
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    this one still touch a piece of me deeply
    check it out poet's the simple heart speaking here.
     
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    Simple, yet it says so much. A soul that rekindles another. Feeling this, yes this was a wonderful write.
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    back to life aye? you were never dead, you were just in silence, that's all, silence, one love sistah........one love
     
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