Black Poetry : Something Real

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  1. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SOMETHING REAL

    I SEARCH YOUR EYES, YOUR TOUCH AND YOUR CONVERSATION
    FOR ANYTHING THAT HINTS OF REALNESS
    WHEN YOU SPEAK I SENSE YOU’RE SO SINCERE
    AND I UNDERSTAND SOMEHOW THAT WE SHARE A CLOSENESS
    BUT THEN THE DAY CLOSES OUT
    AND IN COMES THE DOUBT
    AND WHAT I SAW BEFORE JUST CAN’T BE SEEN AT ALL
    WHEN I SIT IN ALL MY UNCERTAINTY
    WAITING FOR YOU TO CALL
    SOMETHING REAL
    I’VE SEARCHED FOR IT IN YOU
    EVEN AS YOU LIE ASLEEP
    WHEN YOU SPEAK I’M HANGING ONTO YOUR EVERY WORD
    AFRAID I’LL MISS IT, IF I BLINK
    **** BABY, WHAT IS IT, THAT YOU THINK
    YOUR ELUSIVENESS ELUDES ME
    WHILE YOUR TOUCH, MAKES ME WEAK
    YOUR KISSES MELT MY SOUL
    AND DOWN FALLS MY SHIELD AS I CRUMBLE AND FOLD
    TO THAT, WHAT IS REAL
    THE ONLY THING THAT I CAN FEEL
    WHEN I LOOK INTO YOUR EYES
    AND KNOW FOR SURE THAT THERE’S NO DISQUISE
    IT’S THAT LOOK ON YOUR FACE
    LOOKING DOWN AT ME
    IT’S YOUR BODY SCREAMING TO MINES
    BABY SET ME FREE
    YOUR HAND ON MY HAIR
    I TASTE THE YOU THAT ESCAPES
    AS YOUR FINGERS SHOVE FORCEFULLY INTO MY MOUTH
    AND I’M ALL THINKING YEAH
    I’VE GOT IT ALL FIGURED OUT
    THAT THIS IS AS REAL AS IT GETS
    WHEN YOU’RE PUSHING INSIDE AND I’M CRYING FOR MORE
    THIS REALNESS THAT I SEEK
    IS THIS IT
    AM I SURE
    THAT BACKSHOTS ON CAMERA
    SOMEHOW REVEALS A TRUE
    AND THAT SMACKS ON MY *** SPEAKS OF A REALNESS
    A REALNESS OF YOU
    AND THE GRIP OF YOUR HANDS
    AGAINST THE SOFT OF MY SKIN
    AND A MILLION FEELINGS THAT DESCEND
    WITH THE WHISPHER
    THAT WE’RE JUST FRIENDS
    AS YOU DESPERATELY EXPLORE WITH YOUR HANDS ON MY CHEST
    AS I MELT INTO THE WARMTH OF YOUR BREATH ON MY BREAST
    IT’S THE ANTICIPATION THAT I FEEL WHEN MY HEART BEGANS BEATING FAST
    WHEN MY BODY BEGANS CONTRACTING
    AS YOU STROKE AWAY THE PAINS OF MY PAST
    I LISTEN TO THAT THUMP INSIDE OF YOUR CHEST
    IT’S THAT KIND OF REALNESS THAT MAKES MY HEART CONFESS
    IT’S THAT KIND OF REALNESS THAT MAKES ME MOAN YOUR NAME
    BABY IT’S THAT KIND OF REALNESS THAT MAKES ME YEARN TO SHARE YOUR PAIN
    SOMETHING REAL, SOMETHING REAL, BABY SOMETHING I CAN FEEL
    WHEN YOU’RE NOT TALKING AND I’M NOT LISTENING
    IT’S YOUR TOUCH BABY THAT MAKES MY WOUNDS HEAL
    ITS ACTION WORDS AND EMOTIONS THAT PENETRATES DEEP IN MY MIND
    AND I SWARE A PART OF ME STAYS TRAPPED IN THAT TIME
    WHEN WE ARE IN TOTAL AGREEMENT
    AND ALL THE DEALS HAVE BEEN SEALED
    WHEN FOR A MOMENT IN YOU
    I SEE SOMETHING REAL…
    LATAISHA NICOLE
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    This was very sensuous. But, I'm sorry. None of this sounds "real" to me. It just looks like sexual feelings w/o two-way emotion and commitment.

    But, again, your descriptive language in this is hot!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O' my got me in line for something real !!!!
    this was red hot now i feel grown and stuff
    and i want whewwwwww! da way u make me feel

    HOT sis.....
     
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    whoa :read:
    this some muy caliente stuff sister :read:
    I checked out your site and its beautiful as well
    was that pic you?
    that was realllll sexxxy :)
    hot stuff sister :read:
     
  5. Lataisha Nicole

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    Thank yall for taking the time to read a lil piece of what i got going on up in this emotional roller coaster I call a mind. Give thanks sis, and yes that is me, and C.B big up for reading and responding, I don't really know how old you are, it's not really important, it's just when you decide that you no longer want a boy and need a man, often times there's a whole new set of unspoken rules. Like, I love you, but I can't say. And I need you, but it's okay if you go. Older men tend to be very very careful. And it's quite confusing, so when you see any hint of real emotions, you hang on to it with both hands. Remember, they've been there and they've done that. So patience is a must, trust.
    Love on!
     
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    Hey, Lataisha!

    We all must decide what we want and what we'll accept in a relationship.

    I hope in your life path those two factors are the same.
     
  7. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, C.B, my major in college is currently psychology, I didn't know that yours was too. I don't know how long you've been writing poetry,but any seasoned poet will tell you.It's just that thing that we do with words that move the world. Our lives are not perfect, but they are above critiquing. Not every poem that you will read will mean something for the author. Sometimes a good poet has the ability to look at two people share a love moment, and then write the most beautiful love poem ever written or read. It's just poetry. If you are a poet then you know that feelings felt today, may be gone tomorrow. I write for the world to enjoy it. I also write in the moment, and either it's enjoyed or not my biggest concern is freeing me up, to feel something else.In the future they'll never be a reason to respond to me twice about anything, unless it's about love, how we gon be making love, and how we gon make this world a better place with love, and poetry that is. Bless up sis, pace yourself. Don't take everyone's write so literally, because writing is not what we poets live to do. It's what we do to live.
     
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    Lataisha, after reading your piece, I gave a compliment to the piece, said how I interpreted it and finished with a compliment.

    Well, if my age was “not important,” then why mention it? Then, you went on to “explain” relationship stages to me and to tell me how “older men” are and to give me some “advice” on “patience.”

    However, my response here was not sarcastic. It was sincere because I know that women of different ages are on different “life paths.” So, I do earnestly hope that yours is a satisfying one in your search /selection of a mate.

    Then, you had to tell me what your college major is. Now, yes, my college transcripts do have hours of psychology and sociology on them but neither was my major. However, it is not much of any classroom or textbook study which gives me my insight. It comes from living over 40 years of LIFE and having my own relationships with young and older men and observing the relationships of others.

    Yes, poetry is open to interpretation, and I gave mine. And, yes, I agree with you that poets can write about subjects which do not pertain to the author. I have written poems about incest and domestic abuse and other subjects which I have never experienced. Just yesterday, I posted a poem (Hated And Despised) which received different “interpretations” from those who replied to it. But I was not offended. I found it interesting that they saw something I did not when I wrote it.

    So, please take your own advice and not be so literal. Whether that poem was about you, personally, or someone else, I still stated what it spoke TO ME. That is not negative nor “critiquing.” I gave MY interpretation of a poem. That is all. So, please, let's not be at odds. Just because you may not have "liked" my interpretation does not negate my viewpoint.
     
  9. Lataisha Nicole

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    CB, I'm not trying to make a huge issue out of this, all I'm saying is that this is a poetry thread, it 's not ask Dr. Phil. We either like the poems that we read and respond to them, or we read them and don't respond. All I'm saying is if you've been here before, where you assume that I am at, it would be better to speak about your life. The problem begin when you try to read into mine. I didn't ask for a synopsis of where I may be at in my life. I shared something intimate so that those who could relate, would, and those that can not relate, won't. It's so simple. I'm not really interested in what this poem told you about me, I'm more interested in how this poem made you feel about you. I read some of the responses that you received from your poem, No one analyzed you. They told you how great your poem was, and how it made them feel. That is what poetry is all about.. I get enough feed back from **** professors. I don't need it here.
     
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    When we get a sense of that realness, we want to capture that moment, we want to linger within it. I certainly appreciate your expression poetess.
    Sister, we do have a Black Web Site Owners forum, in which you are free to post the link to your site if you so desire, and I do hope that you will.
     
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