Black Poetry : Someone's Child

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  1. SupaUgly

    SupaUgly Member MEMBER

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    Someone’s Child

    Twelve years old and has to deal with the harsh reality of growing up fast

    Pregnant at such an early age in the ghetto

    Was a subject they neglected to teach us about in class

    Where was her parents you ask

    When this child was running wild on the streets

    Was she another case of a youth

    That just could not be reached

    Maybe she was starving for attention

    Did you pay attention to the clues

    Instead you just kicked her out of the house

    When finding out the news

    Now she’s in and out of shelters

    Having evil men protect her

    Selling her body on the streets

    Just to make ends meet

    Instead of enjoying her adolescence

    She spends most of her time on her back

    And on her feet

    Now I ask
    Will we continue to turn the other cheek

    While this child turns to crack to ease the pain

    And just as we decide to open are eyes

    It’s too late

    Teenage girl slain

    This is not imaginary

    This is the reality we have to face

    We are all at fault

    For allowing such a tragedy to take place

    We stood by and did nothing

    We allowed this to happen

    Now we are without a daughter

    A baby is without a mother

    All because we were afraid to take action
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was tyte and felt..........
     
  3. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well written, well expressed, nice flow, good vocab, u didnt try to do too much wit it and it ended perfectly. I loved it espessically because of the message though. Reminds me of a 2pac song- Brendas got a baby.
     
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    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a good piece
     
  5. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice smooth flow, I could easily visualize what was happening and action does need to be taken. Nice delivery. :huh:
     
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