Quiet Poetry Lounge : Someone......please wake me!!!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by kente417mojo, Mar 19, 2004.

  1. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tossing and turning nightly
    nightmares of love
    turned to deceit
    the love I love
    sharing her love with another
    making me the fool
    in this circus of three
    I'm the clown they come to see
    the painted tears are for real
    permanently stain the face
    as my love falls from grace
    no longer is it sacred
    passed like a joint
    all may hit it at this point
    why not leave me to wonder
    walk out the door
    don't leave a new number
    for me to reach you
    that's easier than
    hearing on the street
    that he proposed to you
    while your shoes remain
    at the bottom of my closet
    waiting for heels to fill
    for a night on the town
    with me and no other
    please wake me
    this nightmare continues
    as the laughter between the two of you
    grows stronger and longer
    strangling me to a last breathe
    this must be a test
    I failed miserably
    no make-ups allowed
    only one in the crowd
    who didn't know that you
    were now eating for two
    please wake me now
    dreams gone long enough
    it's true...I'm tough
    but love has a way
    of breaking you down
    for long periods of time
    guess your love was hate
    couldn't have been love
    in the first place
     
  2. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang.. somebody surely does
    need to wake that brotha' up
    so he can smell the coffee :coffee:
    Brilliantly prosed as usual
    Thank you for sharing Poet King

    Many Blessings,
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so emotionally strong. Definitely sounds like a nightmare, for real. You laced those words together like a bitter sweet work of art.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

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    wake up indeed...
    :coffee: wake up:lol:
    i know of this nightmare
    tight drop
    posed well
    thanks for
    sharing your talent...

    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Akilah, Watz and Angel. Thank you very much for the response. Nightmare indeed. Never wanting to sleep, coffee drinking :coffee: .
    Much love to you all. :peace:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done i hear ya and feel it too
     
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    WOW, That was deep. I could think of someone from my past I could have recited this too...and it would have been TRUE. Very nice and to the point.
    Thanks for the wake up call.
     
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    very deep scribe
    flow on
    feeling your drop
    Peace
    BLueWater:heart:
     
  9. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you very much. I appreciate the comments as always. You guys are great. I know the subject matter in this one sucks, but unfortunately that's life and it does happen. Guess we all have to go through stuff. :censored:
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I just went from mzblkangels' who is loving you to this flow
    you know I like the way you write..
    i hope you get pass the nitemare fright
    and see the pitcher is half full..
    not half empty
    have a drink
    was a nice,I stand corrected, it is a nice piece.
    keep flowing......flow...
    thanks for the poem
     
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