Black Poetry : Somebodys Baby

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She's just a ***** with attitude
    struttin' her stuff on a corner
    dressed in fake leather
    that isn't enough to cover
    what she has to offer~
    she's learnt not to be choosy
    because choosy means she loses
    out on the hit she needs
    to get her through the nights~
    so she plies her body
    to feed the hunger she has inside her
    she works like a well oiled machine
    going through the motions of whoredom
    denying the existence of anything else
    anyone has ever taught her~
    like a vampire she stalks
    the streets by night
    and hides by day
    in some dirty back alleyway
    or some seedy hotel room~
    going on a heroin hiatus
    to escape the shame and the bruises
    and the memories she wants to forget~
    she takes life one night at a time
    and the only thing fresh in her mind
    is the last 'client" she met~
    and while she's busy finding a way to die
    somebody, somewhere is praying to God
    hoping with all their heart
    that somewhere
    she's out there
    and
    she's still alive

    (c) nfn 2002
     
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    kt.


    aiight! i'll admit it!! i read this one & had to step away
    ...then come back. you are a true mistress of imagery,
    chile! & i've told you time&time again you have the gift
    of making us... feel. i am lovin' the way you ended this!

    thanks for sharing your gift!!

    itsallLove.

    elayne.
     
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    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I totallyi agree with Elayne ...The ending is what really got me !
    Dnag girl .......just touching souls everyhwere !

    much love and respect for your gift !
    Natasha
     
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    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Elayne..you always make me feel content with what I write by how you reply...you are much appreciated...

    Natasha..thank you...I think this is how it is for a lot of parents who lose their babies to the streets..always left wondering..

    K
     
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    WOW, this is so visual, and awsome a story, and of course I agree with the other ladies, the ending is the bomb.
     
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