Black Poetry : some comfort here????

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by herlove, Jan 2, 2003.

  1. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 6, 2002
    Messages:
    263
    Likes Received:
    1
    Ratings:
    +2
    just wondering if i could find some comfort here...
    spacious is the moments in which i seek to find
    lost and hopeless i seek to see yet i am blind
    thoughts of you are jumbled up in my mind
    and in the vibe of the forcefullness of this precussion...the jolting of the drum .........a direct representation of our beat ..... ponding, resounding effortlessly each motion provokes another notion for you to mesmerize me to a hypnotic transition of deeply loving you
    intensified is the heat .... of the burning of the touch of your hand to my skin .....
    i fear that this battle i shall not win ..... to often i'm weaken and give in ........ to the seduction of ..... love .........the love in you eyes
    and time begins to playfully entice me into a spell of some sort
    and all consciousness i abort
    and time after time i seem to play my self short
    lost in the rapture of the way you carefully carress each curve of my spirituall being
    captured by the way our soul touch and intricately entertwine and i am drunken by the taste of fine wine and slowly i dine in the presence of chosen words u speak that are kind
    can i find some comfort here ....as i bath in the internal tears
    i cry ... simply cause i know not the reason why .... she must come between u and i
    can i find some comfort here..........
     
  2. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Feb 18, 2002
    Messages:
    535
    Likes Received:
    1
    Occupation:
    student
    Location:
    Indianapolis
    Ratings:
    +1
    can i find some comfort here..........

    i felt that

    heartfelt piece

    keep it up
     
  3. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 6, 2002
    Messages:
    263
    Likes Received:
    1
    Ratings:
    +2
    thank lonely poet .... it's comforting to know that u are feeling this piece ..... i have enjoyed alot of your writings also
     
  4. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 10, 2001
    Messages:
    2,696
    Likes Received:
    5
    Occupation:
    Self Employed, Business Consultant
    Location:
    Kansas City, Missouri
    Ratings:
    +6
    Speak my poet speak!

    Laid it down and I felt each and every conflicting emotion, I felt the pleasure and the pain...ya did ya job well , when we evoke thought we are good, but when we evoke feelings we have entered the realm of Greatness...take whatever you are feeling and pour it into your art and what you create will be so beautiful even the pain...has a purpose!

    Blessings on Ya House!
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    well felt from da comfort zone ...... vibe on!
     
  6. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Oct 24, 2002
    Messages:
    363
    Likes Received:
    5
    Location:
    With the thunder gods
    Ratings:
    +6
    Wow I feel you
    deep deep
    flow with it
     
  7. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 6, 2002
    Messages:
    263
    Likes Received:
    1
    Ratings:
    +2
    msluciousb thanks for the bolt of confindence some i hesitate to just let it flow but this one i need to speak ....

    rich.... i on a conquest strive to not just to be there be at one with comfort and all it's pleasures

    blkthunder i sense u flowed in the waters of this read right along with me thanks
     
  8. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Oct 9, 2002
    Messages:
    109
    Likes Received:
    0
    Occupation:
    Chemical Engineering Student
    Location:
    Tuscaloosa, Alabama
    Ratings:
    +0
    i could feel the emotion in this. this was very well done.
     
Loading...