Black Poetry : ~Soaken Ebony~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A keystyle

    I kissed the sky
    the day...
    she wore
    gray...
    a thunderous
    voice
    the rain
    came...
    not caring if
    i was standing in
    the way
    fall on me
    fall on me
    fall on me
    soak into my skin
    deep
    into ebony
    cleanse my body
    from the sin
    that continues to grow
    in me
    i kissed the sky
    and came
    her
    lighting
    i can tell she's
    angry
    but i will not
    leave
    this field
    until
    the rain soaks me
    deep into my skin
    scarred ebony
    i kissed the sky
    but she didn't kiss
    me
    back
    instead she continued to
    scream
    that thunderous voice
    that brought me
    to my
    knees...
    hell
    pure hell
    is starting to become of
    this scenery...
    i kissed the sky
    and finally
    she came..
    came
    on
    me...

    Soaken Ebony
     
  2. Akintiunde

    Akintiunde Member MEMBER

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    There is a great deal of meat to this effort. It generates interpretations that are full of excitement.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! dis was awesome write
     
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks akintiunde and rich

    one luv
     
  5. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your style on this one is flawless! I really enjoyed it!
     
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    Nice job here!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    wow...I'm speechless

    to say that you are a poet...

    is an understatement...

    so let my words over-stand

    this was phenomenal...

    wow...
     
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    The emotion in this piece, saturates us. The imagery here was awesome.
     
  9. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was wow
    nice write
    i enjoyed this alot
    Peace
    Angel
     
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