Black Poetry : So, You Say that You Want to Call Me Sometime...

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me take it from the top
    when I saw your vehicle stop,
    I thought that you were going to
    simply ask for directions.
    Much to my surprise
    you looked deep into my eyes
    and said you see me every day.
    I probably took a step back
    praying that you were just a "gawker"
    and not some kind of crazed stalker.
    But you asked if I was married, said
    that I was so fine, then asked
    if you could possibly call me.
    I thanked you, but said I wasn't ready
    for anything quite like that yet.
    You smiled, said you understood,
    wished me well, and drove away.
    Now that I have had a chance to think on it.
    this is what I wish I'd have had the nerve to say...

    You say I'm fine? Well, you are Fione, capital "F" and I
    had to add that "o". Yes, brother, you've got it going ON.
    And although you look good, and stepped to me
    like you should, I'm afraid to be used like a pawn.
    First of all, you asked me for my number, but I can't
    help but wonder if you ever really intend to use it?
    Or is this just a ploy to see if I would give out
    my digits, and then you'd conveniently lose it?
    Game playing is for kids, but some grown folk still
    play, although they swear that they won't.
    They promise they'll do something, and then when
    push comes to shove, guess what? You got it, they don't.
    And if you do intend to call, would you be calling
    for the booty, or allow me to show you my mind?
    Cause a more caring, genuinely down to earth person
    would be quite difficult for you to find.
    But if I could have, I would have told you that to hear
    that compliment spoken, was an eargasm to my ears.
    Been a long time since I actually heard such words
    spoken to me, but I couldn't move beyond my fears...
    And I mean that literally, cause after I walked away, my
    heart was racing, and my knees were quivering.
    Not often do I have to step out of my head, and get
    reacquainted with what this kind of reality might be delivering.
    So brotha, I'd like to thank you for your kind words.
    Odds are you're truly a gentleman in every possible way.
    But calling me sometime, at this time, would be more than either
    one of us can handle. But I'll be ready when it happens, some day.
     
  2. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like it! & its way better than Tweet's "Call Me!"
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was tyte sis.................
     
  4. watzinaname

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    Glad that you like it Tha Emissary, I'm not familiar with Tweet's song, maybe I'll check it out. Thank you so much.
    Thank you for saying this piece was tight brotha Rich, I appreciate the compliment.
     
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    As Im sure, he's waiting to make that move again, because the first move you made..was the right one. Sometimes, "refusal", makes the chase more fun.
    ...good move.
    I enjoyed reading this piece, fully. wonderful drop watz
     
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    I really like this...can't help but admite that things like this go through my mind too when dudes try to step. Good scribe.
     
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    them instincts are what save us from a whole lot of things...
    now the voice is ringing again...hope it's singing when he drives by again..
    I understand those dilemmas watz...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queent, I guess refusal does make the chase more interesting, even though it does make one feel like part of a chess game. Happy to know you enjoyed this sis, thank you.
    Yes, Chastity we do have to really think about the possibilities. Thank you for responding so poet.
    You're right deepy, got to listen to that voice inside that says to err on the side of safety. Glad you understand, thank you sista.
     
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    Loved this one watzinaname! I like the creativity, the "eargasm". I'm going to have to use that word and wondering the true purpose of why they want the number! This was reeeaaall!!!
     
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    Very Nice sister.............Lovin' da flow!!
     
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