Quiet Poetry Lounge : ...so I Fell

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Feb 23, 2012.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    he came to me like
    a thousand feathered kisses on my lashes
    and i let him light upon me
    gently

    i told him i couldn't stand
    for too much more

    miracle worker that he is
    he gave me so much more

    made me rock and reel
    like a sinewy palm waving
    in his windstorm

    i told him i seriously couldn't stand
    for any more, for sure

    he smiled at me,
    with eyes that illuminated
    my whole being

    i promised him, i really, really
    couldn't stand for
    this - not another minute!

    without a word
    he held his arms outstretched
    and opened all his love to me

    my knees gave way
    .....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O' my this was so lovely well done made me ((((((tingle))))))......
     
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    Dear Sister Poet Alyce,

    Lovely. I hope you take what I am about to type as a compliment because it is meant to be one. There are few poems that I read that I say to myself I wish I had written that, this my friend, is one such poem. I felt this everywhere within that could feel. Breath-taking.

    (smile)
     
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    Sista TotalView, you are soooo kind! I am both honored and humbled by the compliment! :):heart:
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    stunning heat....searing intimacy...just a phenomenal read, Alyce
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh oh oh oh oh! thank you sooo much, abstract219!:)
     
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    Still up in the attic. Whoa, this here flow Alyce, made me wish I was at the mercy of his miracle workings! My, my, my!

    Definitely, feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco :dance:
     
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    she came
    she broke hearts
    she left

    :em4600:
     
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    Hello Alyce.

    I knew I would like this piece by the end of the first stanza. Succinct and sweet.
     
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