Black Poetry : snakes

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  1. trinitymatrix79

    trinitymatrix79 Member MEMBER

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    Snakes

    On the way to our last breath, hearts get wounded and feelings get crushed,
    By merciless minds that selfishness blinds,
    Making me realise human beings are for each others´ souls cannibals,
    And when the flowers of kindness try to blossom,
    Snakes take perverse pleasure preparing their deaths,
    And organising their funerals,
    When books try to speak about love,
    Their graceful words get censored,
    I’ve sealed my heart but it feels heavy,
    Inside feelings get steamy, making me feel stranded,
    Moral catalepsy leaves my mind exhausted,
    And your ungrateful sentiments leave my brain cells frosted,
    I´d rather bury the fury that inside of me you´ve created,
    And ignore the scars that hurt whenever I am laughing,
    I wish I could forget about your faces, and not recall your names,
    I just wish I couldn't see ..I just wish I couldn't feel....
    But it seems I´ll have to wait patiently til the day I stop breathing...
     
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    trinitymatrix79 Member MEMBER

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    feel free to criticize let me know what you think I have just started with poetry and need some constructive criticsm...may peace be upon you all
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!

    welcome to DESTEE'S poetry playground
    ya flow is a side show
    u scribe in depth
    i feel it deep within keep it coming
    don't stop my friend
    welcome to da family of love :)
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
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    like your flow . the way you captured the emotions to describe the feelin. Great!!!!!!!
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that was goooooooodddddd lol nothing bad to say here I look forward to more peace and blessins
     
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