Quiet Poetry Lounge : Snakes On A Train

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by oldsoul, Dec 28, 2007.

  1. OldSoul

    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Snakes On A Train

    Let us make it plain
    About snakes out in the rain
    They will head straight for the plane
    To escape from all the pain
    That throbs within their brain
    And drives them all insane.
    Snakes upon a plane
    Can cause a major strain
    Which no one can explain
    Except Shaft or Mick Spillane
    Why they slither so profane
    And rush you like cocaine
    When they hit your jugular vein
    As the blood flows down the drain.
    I hope its clear and plain
    Why they always can attain
    Access to a train
    Or slide down rough terrain
    To drink up cheap champagne
    And then they’ll eat your brain
    While smoking mary-jane
    In your car on lover’s lane.
    But if I dont seem sane
    Just ask Big Daddy Kane
    If snakes are on the wane
    Or simply hiding out in Spain
    Where people dont complain
    When there’s snakes aboard the plane.
    They wont try to hide their pain
    When you gas them with propane
    Or beat them with a chain
    Till they beg you to abstain.
    They can be Dutch or Dane
    Or on the border of Bahrain
    They may pop up in Maine
    With much to lose or gain
    When snakes get on a plane
    They expect to rule and reign
    So lets go against the grain
    And kill them on the train.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a talent you are, oldsoul. You teach us in so many ways... your classes, poetic words, and in visual images as well. Thank you.
     
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    They slide on the plane, in plain view,
    hist aiming straight at me and you.

    But beware of the ones that still lerk in the grass
    never lose sight of their dirt in the past.

    Awesome piece poet !!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man this joint took my head str8 elsewhere
    as the pain hit me on da train in plan view
     
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    Hi Brother Oldsoul
    You have indeed made this very plain
    and the video was brought your poem out
    very visual. Much love to you warrior

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    *STANDING OVATION!*

    'Loved your speaking in this as well as the message!

    Your presentation here covered all the bases, a visual and auditory history lesson!
     
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    great message, Bro Oldsoul.................message to the snakes: CHOO-CHOO!
     
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