Black Poetry : Smile

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  1. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Smile
    by Monad.poetress


    Smile.....
    Is simply what he said
    "every day I see you walkin' roun' like you dead"
    Babygirl whats so bad that you can't even smile
    I just stared and thought for a while

    Maybe its the fear of raising my son alone
    Or maybe its the fact that my entire paycheck is gone
    Maybe my smile left when my roof began to leak
    Maybe those long walks to the bus stop that really hurt my feet

    Maybe my smile left when all my bills were overdue
    When I was locked out of the house and didn't know what to do
    Or maybe I can't smile cause I got on cheap shoes
    And I barely made it thru my son's terrible twos

    Yet he says smile....
    A man I don't even know
    Am I really walking around with my head hung that low

    I look at him again
    Smile.....
    he says to me
    Just one little smile might set your soul free
    Just one little smile might force you to do it again
    Smile babygirl
    You've always got a friend
    Even when you can't see him
    He's patching up your roof
    He's paying all your bills and stopping that aching tooth

    He's that little ray of sunshine when you swear there's nothing but gray sky
    He's that little comfort when you really want to die

    So smile babygirl
    Cause whether you know it or not
    God is gon' be with you...never think he has forgot


    ***Monad.poetress
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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    Now you KNOW sista afta this one i HAD to get my smile on right :D :rolling: :look: :D :)
    this just had sweet vibes to it :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all smiles this really was sweetly pose'd
     
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    This had a very real feel to it. I've been told to smile by complete strangers...male strangers. And if they only knew the half, they would probably be crying, lol. Anyway, I like the way you expressed this feeling here.
     
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    this poem reached out to me and cheered me up a little.... you have accomplished the job of a what a writer is supposed to do.... to make the reader sincerely relate what you write to his own life
     
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    this one is the goods...it made me smile thank u ...write us more...hookupman president of the lyndon street poets
     
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    Smile...
    When you're at your "lowest" ...that smile will light somebody's world and in turn ...someone will come along and light your world...smiles travel fast.
     
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    monad...
    this was wonderful...i was just speaking with my cuzin last night..and she is a single mother with a boy child...and she said absolutely almost everything you stated in your flow...I want to send her this poem...can I?
    hopefully she will hear (again) that she is not alone..and maybe give her a smile in the midst of it all...cause the child definitely needs to see mommy smile...(I do know..forget understand...know!)
    let me know if i may share it with her..
     
  9. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes Deepy
    you can surely share this poem with her

    My boss told me one day that I was looking down
    She said no matter what you do don't let nobody steal your joy
    And thats what I had been doing. It is very hard being a single mother
    but I have learned that the only Love I will give my life for is GOD's love.
    So share this with her and tell her to smile.

    ****Monad.poetress
     
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