Black Haiku : small forest

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jun 22, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    OOOH..laughing, chatting
    bending, swaying in the breeze
    tall black cedar trees
     
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    Oh my this is very visual...very beautiful :cool: My goodness!
     
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    this was awesome i love the way u created it
     
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    Wow, deepy, this is such a lovely vision, I'll try to flow with it....

    Tall black cedar tree
    The leaves applaud their branches
    As the wind dances
     
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    2 more

    hearing pouring rain
    seeing arms lifting upward
    shadows standing tall

    ^rhy-th-mi-cal drops
    shifting like jazz on the leaves
    black/brown cedar trees




    ^rhythmical = you got to make it 4 syllables..!
    *come on watz...you can definitely do it...
     
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    Deepy, you continue to serve this visual treat...

    The leaves are dripping
    from the rain, as the soil drinks
    the earth's thirst is quenched

    The roots continue
    to expand, throughout God's land
    Brown tree, embrace me
     
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    rays of light shine through
    resting at the cedars trunk
    I hear the tree speak

    many, many, rings...
    this cedar has seen great things
    Wise Old Tree...it tis
     
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    And the wise tree speaks
    While its tenants build their nests
    Soaking up tall tales
     
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    yet that wise old tree
    listens from which the wind blows
    as the leaves drop in silence
     
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    nesting birds on leaves
    arms of branches -trampolines
    joyful cedar trees.
     
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