Black Poetry : Slug In Autumn....

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  1. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A slimy trace mixed with footsteps of dracula and trails of bloodvampires and vomits of nightcreatures is draging behind me while i try to climb up a mosscovered tree trunk.Laborius i try to pull me up but the attempt fails,cause i see a bleu sky and pieces of thistles are stabbing in my back while i wrestling in tha mud. A shield would have been nice to take the beatings.A bird fly,s by and say,s "'i,m sorry but i have to feed my little ones"" and i think "'what a lucky day "' anotherday survived.
    I better hurry up before the winter guests come.I might find a shelter with the mole.......

    cause darker than this it can not get.......

    Dont look at me weird cause i traveled along manny roads and knocked on manny doors ...

    "knock knock ...who is there ? ''

    answer ...."'""i dont know"'

    "'well can i come in than "'


    "'No "'..

    somethimes one eye wich streched out...
    and observes me ..

    looks at me for a second and than....


    .....BOOM!..

    ""Go away!"" they scream behind the closed door.....

    slowly i shuffle furter...


    brrrr..

    jee its cold..
    i can not move...
    winter has come...


    ""go ""

    "'go home"'

    "to where i dont have one.."'

    i"i dont have one""...











    "cochlea! "" "'cochlea!""
     
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    deep flow Lady i can feel what ya saying
    release it nice work poet
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    see dis was da one that showed me how cold it can be outside
    looking in for hope of warmth .......but go away go home !
    see i have none knock !!!! knock !!!! ding dong.....love this flow
     
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    this is different for me, different............................GOOD! :thanks: 4 releasing a bit of you on us......
     
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    Dear friend,

    i like this poem even though it's a very sad one. Screaming out Solitude and rejection.
    Let me tell you that you may 'feel' alone, but you 'are actually' not alone. And even though telling you this will not change the 'feeling', I just wanted you to know this as a fact. Just as you telling me that I can always knock on your door.

    I love you. (don't ever forget)

    moham
     
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    Your talent is showing like an undergarment exposed!
     
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    Slug in Autumn..... this is a tight concept my sister and you laid out your flow with alot of style. :welldone:
     
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    Thank you sweet angel:heart:


    rich brrr cold huh.....
    yes its cold ....
    guess we have to get some warmer coats this season..:heart:


    Lilcherry thank you for alowwing me to post a different flow.and that you liked it:heart:sis


    Moham sweet sis :heart:


    let me explain love...

    Sumthimes you know a lot of people or youre serounded by manny...
    but still feel lonely.....
    it more has to do with people round me getting closer and pulling tha door..


    We alll know this feeling like you have a conversation....

    with someone and when you share you go like .........


    "'óh do you have that to....? me to .?..wauw ....
    or.....jee i went through tha same thing.....



    """that ............makes you feel not alone on this earth..."""








    I know i,m not alone.....
    defenatly not...

    I have god in my life who shines his love trough people...who alow themselfs to be canals of god....:heart:



    Poetsought ..

    aww thank you for the complement...
    and that comming from you the great Poet itself...
    i needed that cause i have my doubts about my poems...:heart:


    Caramelhappy brother ..
    thank you for tha read ..:heart:
     
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