Black Poetry : Slow Down (Dedicated to a important member that i meet a few weeks ago)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (past life)

    she would play one the Devil's Playground
    in hells kitchen...
    they called her hot_sauce cuz she was alwayz
    Mz.Behavin
    some warned her not to get to hot
    "fo' she melt herself"
    but she didn't care...
    sex gave her that satisfaction...
    even if only for a little while...

    (realization)
    her name was Queen Swana
    one day Mz.Behavin came into a room
    and as usual the tempeture rose..

    this woman had a flare about her...
    she was different,gentle,kind soul...
    warmth radiated from her....

    she told her...
    she told hot her peotry was soo good...
    but she was too fast at her age...
    yet she didn't know that reflected...
    her soul...it was practically on fire...
    she said..."hot...u need to slow down.."
    called her "sweet child"

    but she wasn't sweet at the tyme...
    only bitter..Hot wished she would die..
    so who was this woman? her name it said it all..
    she was a Queen...

    she told story she cared and
    how smart she was...noone ever told her that...everyone said she was ignorant,stupid obnoxius, even retarded...
    but she wanted more...

    Hot_Sauce didn't want to be a quivering soul
    on a cracked street corner...
    strung out on the needle...

    so she slowed down...and was one with her spirit

    (okay people this sucks i know...but WRITERS BLOCK is a...smh..i hate it forreal...why would god invent such a thing?...) *sigh*
    -story

    copywrite 2004, all rights reserved
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like :)
    sweet child
    with the brown eyes
    very nice poem sis
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Story

    Some great advice was given, try not to rush life, let things happen in God's good time, be patient, life will be much more enjoyable. :grouphug:
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u both..with my past mistakes behind me....i can FINALLY start a new life...*relieved sigh* i'm lovin it...i'm just gratful i finally woke up...and smelled the carael latte..lol
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    very nice
    likes the message
    Peace
    Angel
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thnaks angel...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    I'm a little mad at you for saying this sucks!
    Your creativity is amazing
    NEVER DOWNPLAY IT UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCES
    YOU HEAR ME?

    Ok now that that's out the way...lol

    I love the message in this poem.
    So often the youth sail through life
    Looking in vain for inspiration
    And validation.
    Unlucky for some they never find it.
    Blessed for you, you did.
    That's something to be thankful for.
    You have a gift little sister of mine
    Never underestimate the power of it!

    Again very nice scribe!


    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Story...

    You have nothing but glory to unfold to the world...You are our guilding light :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: ... and none the less a angel with wings... :angel1:
    and we your FAMILY here is...surely...THE WIND BENEATH YOUR WINGS

    LUV YOU SWEETNESS...Queentswana
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey twision...lol...i hear u i won't say it again...lol

    queen...i'm glad u liked it...it was dedicated to u...lol..u know i gots love for u...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    the story, imagine my surprise to hear you say you suck


    ....


    Your poetry flows like water and eases like a rain in a desert.....you never suck:)
     
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