Black Poetry : Slave Rooted American - part l

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Feb 6, 2005.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    so many colors
    so many roots...connected to so many trunks
    stretching deep, deep back
    back
    beyond before the middle passage
    inside
    some darkened hole
    where GRACE
    took over
    and inner strength regenerated
    then
    out of the dark..
    eyes blinded by
    the blue skied light
    and
    into some hole
    packed down ...
    deep inthe dark again
    touching other roots
    feeling all the sap and juices
    in that hole
    where
    fecal smells engulf the nose
    permeates
    til GRACE takes over
    some inner strength regnerates
    as they watch
    those who missed grace
    jump over/off or
    just give up
    back beyond and thru
    middle passages
    to this place where
    30 pieces of silver -
    Sold!
    bought a father?
    and once again..
    some danken place
    some whipping pole
    some musty hole..
    aah GRACEtook over
    regenerating soul

    this amazing grace made famous by some "master boatman?"
    was OUR sweet song
    OUR GRACE that saved our inner being ..
    saved us thru the wretchedness
    regenerating , rerooting..
    where are you now?






    this is the beginning of what i hope becomes a longer work...
    i think the last 6 lines maybe the end of the final piece. but i am notsure.
    this is only part l


    (c)ncn/deepy-feb.2005
     
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    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    peace,

    I am here reading this poweful poem.............can't wait to see the extended version.....

    peace my sista!
     
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    The imagery is so crisp, girl, you're taking me there in every line. What a great great contribution to black history month. And I'm glad it's only part 1 cause I definitely wanna read some more. Much love and peace, deepy.
     
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    Well, you know I can't wait to read more. Your brush paints such a vivid picture of heartless conditions that are ancestors were forced to live under. Do flow on.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    harmony of peace is felt lovin the flow here
    Mo ! mo ! mo !
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks family...i am slowly working on this one...i have lines on so many pieces of paper...challenging and i am loving it...
    i am going to put this into critique (which is where i meant for it to be anyway) definitely open for discussion
     
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    the images brought forth from this deep rooted
    poetically excuted...prose
    has me thanking the Lord
    i was not in one of those holes...where
    "fecal smells engulf the nose"

    imaginative piece sis...work it till it's dun...word
    one love
    khasm
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks khasm...i'm working on it..working it....working
     
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    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, yes, yes, my type of poetry. i really enjoyed this.

    Lyr1c
     
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    ...by all means, do not let the flow stop
    allow it to evolve into the EPIC peace
    that it has shown, that it is meant to be

    when you begin to write on topic
    that is fathoms deep...it must reflect
    the "Amazing Grace"...that gives it,
    its power, its perseverance, its momentum
    ...its ability to lift up those who read of it

    This was a wonderfully written piece!

    Where am I now?--> Trying to carry on the legacy of the Grace
    that brought my foremothers and fathers through the middle passages of pain...


    As I stated before...This was a wonderfully written piece!
     
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