Black Poetry : Slain by True Love

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  1. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tears seem to be my only retreat
    Shot by the same love that swept me off my feet
    A black man's scorn has burned away my smile
    Tortured my self esteem and disfigured my profile
    Slain by the one true thing I could call my own
    Spit out by his love, his love for me is gone

    Insanity seems inviting
    because now my life is plain
    Spirit tortured, soul set aflame
    Mentally I needed him, just to be myself
    Deep within his arms I felt the richness of love's wealth
    But now the rainbow will vanish
    I don't know how I'll manage
    The slow jam cds have been shattered
    My heart is ripped and tattered

    His smile occupies my mind
    and his warmth controls my every thought
    Maybe if I had given more this love wouldn't have been
    rented but instead have been bought
    So now the memories of his love
    engulf me like a river
    Thoughts of his caress make my body quiver

    But its only a mere thought
    for his love is gone away
    Slain by his rejection I don't want to see
    another day
    I return to my solitude with tears as my only retreat
    For the same love that kills me once swept me off my feet

    ~Mona
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep felt heartbroken scribe of one
    this had much depth and emotions flowing
    let no man take one under ...stand , hold ya head up high
    wow!!! flow on poetress
     
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    :wave: Haaaaaaaaaaaaay Sister Monad.Poetess :wave:

    Sister Sister Sister Sister Sister ... :bowdown: ... i bow down to you !!! :bowdown:

    Beautiful work of art you've shared with us !!!

    Gurl ... when i first started reading, i thot ... hold up ... how she know my bizness?!! :wink:

    Very Very Very Nice Sister !!

    Keep it Flow'n !!!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    how true...
    powerful stanza...

    Write on sister...
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I return to my solitude with tears as my only retreat
    For the same love that kills me once swept me off my feet"
    Whew, sista, this SOOOOO conveys that feeling of how in the world could I be so loved one moment, and so despised in what seems moments later. Lord KNOWS I have been here. Thank goodness, eventually we are somehow able to move on. I can't give you enough praise on this poet!!!!!!!
     
  6. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...this was briliant
    it is such a thought provoking piece.
    And I can tell that all of this is just spilling from your heart.
    Im truely inspired by this ...
    PLEASE..."KEEP EM COMIN"...1
     
  7. garlicsalt99

    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That which brings the most pleasure can potentially bring the most pain. Love is double edged like that. I felt this piece.
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sad, but really good

    I love how u started and ended the poem with the same 2 lines. keep ya head luv. *poeticly
     
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