Quiet Poetry Lounge : Skating on Thin Ice

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Dior Robynsonne, May 2, 2004.

  1. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the middle
    of your lake,
    I chill and
    eventually freeze.
    Flirting with you is
    something that can't lead to
    anything good.
    I'm skating on thin ice.
    In the moonlight
    of my creeping
    I nearly fall in;
    the artic breeze
    calms the embers of my
    inner flames and I almost
    become cold and
    lifeless dealing with your
    frozen winds.
    I'm skating on real thin ice
    and I don't think the outer me
    knows the real danger of
    getting caught up with something
    unusual and out of synch.
    Still, will I swim or sink?
    Are you something I need or just
    a worthless link?
    The question's spring up like
    a black forest,
    and I can't see the clearing.
    If the tree falls and i'm not around,
    will it make a sound?
    Will it even hit the ground?
    If I'm lost in her then how can I be found?
    Sure i'm filled with a thrill, skating on thin ice,
    Or is my fate sealed with a flip of the dice?
    I skate and the crack threatens to become wider,
    Still I skate and flip as the daystar grows lighter.
    Eventually I've got to stop playing this vice,
    and discontinue skating on her thin ice.

    Copyright 2004 Anno Domini/ "Earth's Wynne" Publishing
    ~Dior X. Robynsonne
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great analogy, liked the rhythm of it too, sounds like it's best to stay on the safe side in this situation.
     
  3. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Looks like your right. I might need to let the cold go just this once.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    maybe just maybe u should
    but u are felt here indeed
    express on
     
  5. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I appreciate the love pa. God bless.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    likes this
     
  7. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you once again babylove
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dior Robynsonne,
    Very nice write; i was not familiar with your work (can't catch 'em all) so when i saw your name as POTM i did a small search.

    Nice job; i enjoyed the read...
    Peace and Blessings
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice feel to your flows
    playing with danger
    i am liking your drops
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  10. Dior Robynsonne

    Dior Robynsonne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :teach: :teach: :teach: Once again your love is breathtaking and I appreciate it to a greater degree :teach: :teach: :teach:
     
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