Black Poetry : Sisterhood

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  1. PatriceCQueen

    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have a story
    That has never been told
    It is my story
    Brave and bold

    I never felt I had to worry
    Until histories story unfold
    I never walked my sister’s path
    Or stand even near my mother’s bath
    Man and I upon the warpath
    Trying to equal the boy
    That I let steal my bath

    He is my shadow
    Plain and tall
    Helped me build
    My wall ever tall
    He was the child
    I never was
    In him I tried to be lost
    Girls of my day were just not valuable
    In this thought I was lost

    I raced with this boy
    Showed him I was boss
    Then tried to stand over him
    As sisters once stood under him

    I quickly tired of this play
    Tried to walk with him not stray
    We could not understand each other
    Seeing he was never my brother
    I now understand the thing I lacked
    It was my sister’s bath
    The washing of my mother’s back
    Somehow I fell of the track
    When I ran to be
    The boy I lacked

    I am a woman now
    Newly born in my form
    I want to walk with my sisters
    This after morn
    To inhale their sweetness
    Our spirits reborn
    Honour our mother
    The one I did scorn

    Patrice C. Queen
     
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    Thank you for sharing that Sister.

    The immaculate conception of a woman...

    It touched me in a way few poems these days do. Very glad to see a poem honouring the things you just did. Almost had me wanting to shed a tear.

    Sheer beauty in its most complex form, words.

    ~Ikoro
     
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    Excellent piece my sista, let me hear it on the mic..
    I always like the way you bring a piece to life.
     
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    embracing from da past
    this piece was tyte sis...
     
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    thank you for your response, i like your spirit

    Peace

    Patrice
     
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    i am always encouraged by your responses

    Peace

    Patrice
     
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    one of these days we need to poetically flow again


    peace

    Patrice
     
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    i enjoyed your poem and loved the end so much..
    tis so wonderful to feel your growth..
    your opening up...
    your appreciation of self....
     
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    sure thing soon we will colab again sista , still lovin this scribe
     
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    Enjoyed this piece remembering child's play, and embracing the woman you've become poetess.
     
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