Poetry Critiques : SISTER, I SEE...

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  1. 1SensualBrotha

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    :blowkiss: Sister, I See…

    Sister, I see your struggles,
    I see your inner strengths;
    I see the strain
    Of the love lost,
    And the heartfelt pain.
    I see your need to be a voice heard;
    Your good deed as you feed,
    A lost and hungry bird.
    I see the processes of your mind,
    Your creative and unique imagination;
    I see your need to find
    A brother who will show his deep appreciation.
    I see your dream of everlasting joy;
    Your desire for a “real” man,
    Not an immature little “boy”.

    Sister, I see things about you,
    That you wouldn’t even believe;
    I see those who continue to doubt you,
    Although you know you can achieve.
    I see your grace and soulful style,
    Your tender sweetness and electric smile.
    I see the intense and passionate love you want to make.
    I see your need for a comforting massage,
    When your overworked and tired body aches.
    I see your soft and sensual kisses—
    Your daytime thoughts and nighttime wishes.

    Sister, I see your days and nights sitting all alone,
    Waiting impatiently by the telephone.
    I see “Mr. Right Now” waltz in and out of your life;
    I see your dream of being a lawful-wedded wife.
    I see your need for unbridled passion and romance;
    For a candlelight dinner,
    Followed by an erotic slow dance.
    I see your smiles and tears,
    The way you hide your fears,
    And your enthusiastic cheers,
    As your happiness finally nears.

    Sister, I see your sincerity, sympathy,
    And Motherly Love;
    I see the many prayers you’ve sent to the Man Up Above.
     
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    Brotha I KNOW...

    My goodness:blush: you ARE one 'sensual' Brotha. *teary-eyed*... we need more of you... what a wonderful scribe... one of a kind:spinstar:

    :shades:

    :picture:
     
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    sisterly love indeed i see her as well very nicely created to the worthy ones
    don't change a thing here .....great write
     
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    wow i see that this was awesome my faith is restored that, that good brother is still out there
     
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    And it's the knowing that there are some brothers who truly do know...that warms my heart. So lovingly crafted poet.
     
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    still digging this so i had to dig it back out the crates
     
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    and a wonderful come backer
     
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