Black Poetry : Sin In Us All---verse 1

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  1. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    1 st verse---its real!!!!

    my blind eyes- I see your troubles from yesterday...//
    well-today is 2morrow, only 2 different days...//
    live Your life like water-flow through in your own ways...//
    man, the aire is itchin' to grab hold of ya face
    And rip it all away..//
    beFore ya know it-you got your (Face Off) like John..//
    masked on to hide the ugliness
    your only human-forget thats wrong....//
    tainted sins got you feelin' radioactive-
    trashin' the age and the way you live...//but your like,"fuggit!"-
    the longer you stay in this hate you give,
    the longer you'll just degrade your character..//--trust it..
    i neva fall-i crash landed..//
    outta my cell onto anotha plateu-leveled my planet..//
    now I'm viewin' the demolition from anotha position up top....//
    head bangin' like punk rock-submissioned from livin' crazed in oblivion, stop..//

    switchin' lanes in my brain but this mind is ached up..//
    these ladies are insane-they left their brains home covered in make-up..//
    "papi stop me, i can't breathe no more!!"--mami you're inevitable..//
    its a shame you ain't grow an inch of 'mind elevation'--which is soo incredible..//
    i'm sorry love, I kno I'm crayzie--but this iz real...///
    sorta like the love you have for GOD,but neva feel..//
    LORD-these imperfectionz are stressin' me mentally..//
    sentimentally i'm wrecked inside
    watchin' my
    reflection bendin' in front of me--why???..///

    ~~~talkin' to myself~~~

    "Now whut you must do---
    is stop thinkin'...//
    cause on da real , man, you have some issues-
    and i'm confused..//"

    ~~~talkin to my brotha~~~

    remember those times we shared when we were young and 'stinky'..//
    retrack ya mind , swing it back like a slinky,cuz now i don't kno what to do with you...//choose............choose.....
    cuz Brother this romance is,
    givin' you too many chances...//
    this devious life we percieve
    just leads
    us to lettin' the Devil's(D'evilz)bong dance us..//
    its slim(chance is slim)baby
    never win, maybe
    we could win....//
    but sin never gives up--
    so how We gon' give up sin..??//
    if its a possibility then I am GOD spittin' lyrically..VOID!!!//
    CUZ SIN IS IN US ALL--- fruck ya possibilities...NOISE!!!//

    copyright 2001--------------Yeah i kno its long--just vibe w/ me...

    "L.I.F.E.--Losin' It For Ever----or so you thought......:rolleyes: ":D
     
  2. LURK

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    all comments welcomed...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said and up close & personal
    dis on da money
     
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    This was just beautiful!:) I need a tissue!lol

    Aaliyahmonet
     
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    where do it all go wrong Lurk?

    a soldier ponders


    DSS
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    les bring it back a minute..........
    this is one of my favorite pieces....

    i should have it on spoken word in a few days....look out for this yall!!!!!!

    all comments welcomed.......
     
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    my blind eyes- I see your troubles from yesterday...//
    well-today is 2morrow, only 2 different days...//

    nice way to start this off

    it got my attention

    should be way more replies to this

    real good piece

    uppin for ya lurk
     
  8. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i want to do this for spoken word,....please ,Rich,if u see this ,or khasm ,how do i get with it...??i would love for yall to hear my flow on this....please get back
     
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    lurk..
    this was , using my old fashion terms, fab,.,,u..lous!
    the way it began
    the talking to self
    the "love you have for GOD, but never feel"
    the "i'm viewin the demoliton from another position - on top"
    the "reflection bending in front of me - why"
    so many lines i just can quote because of the power
    the multi dimension of them
    loved it...
    wish i could hear it...alas my mac will not let me in..
    but I suspect i will someday hear it...i suspect
    thanks
     
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    This is incredible work Lurk!
     
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