Black Poetry : simple eruption

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  1. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    words
    they struggle fight and strive
    to rise and break the surface
    of what is layered over the land
    they percolate and filter through
    mountains of falacy
    to erupt and flow over jagged
    and cruel terrains relentlessly rocky
    and run smooth and fiery over
    arid barren plains in a simple
    hopeless flow that once given
    over to the elements that exist
    will simply cool and coalesce
    and will simply meld and blend into
    yet one more layer of the very land
    over which it erupted and ran

    03/28/03/ Michael
     
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    Moses the Poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really like the movement of your imagery.
    This is a poem that I can relate to personally.
    You really brought words to life here.

    Andrew
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Moses. I just write it like I see it...
    when I can...
    Looking forward to reading more of
    your poetry which has been excellent!
     
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    diggit....

    currently being one that is floundering for my once prolific use of verse and imagry...i must say...this does give inspiration

    thank you for the scribe scrybe.....

    **pondering**
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx, StarGoddess.
    I'm happy to pass on any inspiration
    before I am buried lol. God bless.
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Cindy. It feels more like
    the last desparate gasps of
    an old poet lol.
    peace to you.
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I guess I am just going to have to keep my eye on you cus you sho nuf got somn to say
    lovin the flow of you words
    beautiful imigary
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Shaz. In time and season's due...
    God bless.
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as the volcano burst in eruption...it's lava spewing over the land, flowing hither and tither.

    loving the flow of you.
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Baller.
    Much love.
     
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