Black Poetry : SIMONE'S SONG

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  1. Kemetstry

    Kemetstry going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Waiting on a northbound train
    to pass across the track
    Radio blast me insane
    dj talking smack

    Waiting on a northbound train
    hoping it aint long
    Pull a pen and rack my brain
    writing Simone's song

    Will it be about her eyes
    or her braided hair
    or creamy legs and thighs
    and her skin so fair

    Will she send a picture soon
    sexy in a thong
    looking up I see the moon
    writing Simone's song

    ~ And the words dont come so easily
    ~ as they did long ago
    ~ But I must still struggle on
    ~ cause I need her to know

    Finally the train goes by
    Now I can go home
    Writing a refrain at last
    my mind starts to roam

    Turning in the southbound lane
    hoping I'm not wrong
    Did I pen these words in vain?
    Writing Simone's song


    by kemetstry
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Kemetstry
    Wow..this makes one want to write about love again
    Very smooth flow, it moved with the motion of the train
    and I could hear the song so plain..yeah play it again
    very lovely

    Peace and Love
     
  3. Kemetstry

    Kemetstry going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Thanx


    Tis the season. All is love until nex wednesday :hearts2: :grouphug: :kiss:
     
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    Kemetstry:
    :terrific: :terrific: :terrific:
    I see your love is flowing.
    Another lovely joint.

    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Bro K droppin mad luv
     
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    Kemetstry going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Thanx Again

    :hearthis: :hearts2: :kiss: :D :juggle:
    It's easy to do this with encouragement
     
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    The rhythm of this scribe, flowed like a song. Your words put the reader right in the moment, wondering, hoping, all was not in vain. Simply beautiful.
     
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    Kemetstry going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Thanx
     
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    Sweet . . .

    I really liked the the rhythm and flow--it went so easily, I didn't even notice the guards going up--Amun-Ra

    :toast:
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    i don't see any

    vain here poet

    so i think you're good

    peace

    trust me

    i know trains lol

    just teasin' KEM

    you know how you like to joke

    lol
     
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