Black Poetry : SILENTLY I SCREAMED

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  1. FINDLOVEINME

    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    PLEASE NO, STOP.NOT IN FRONT OF OUR CHILD, I'LL DO WHATEVER YOU SAY,
    PLEASE
    I, AM, SORRY, NO, STOP, PLEASE DON'T HIT ME AGAIN, STOP, I'M SORRY, PLEASE GO AWAY,
    PLEASE
    JUST LEAVE ME ALONE

    GET OFF OF ME

    I DON'T WANT TO THINK NO MORE
    I CAN'T EVEN PRAY NO MORE
    YOU HIT ME SO MANY TIME UNTIL I CAN'T KEEP SCORE
    PLEASE DON'T MAKE ME BLEED LIKE BEFORE
    WILL I DIE TONIGHT OR JUST WAKE UP SORE

    BLOOD STREAMING DOWN MY FACE LIKE TEARS
    EYES SO BLACK AND SWOLLEN, UNTIL I CAN'T SEE CLEAR
    MY BODY BATTERED, BRUISE AND TREMBLING, OH MY GOD I CAN NO LONGER HEAR
    I CAN SEE MY CHILD, SCREAMING, CRYING AS SHE SPEAKS WITH FEAR,
    PLEASE DON'T KILL MY MOMMY, SHE SAID
    AS HER DADDY YELLS “GET THE HELL OUT OF HERE”

    ONE MORE BLOW TO THE HEAD, HE SAID JUST FOR OLD TIME SAKE
    SO HE KICKED ME ONCE MORE, AND THAT WAS MY FATE
    DYING IN MY OWN BLOOD, AS I PRAY AND WAIT
    WATCHING MY CHILD BEING CONSUMED IN HATE
    OH GOD PLEASE HELP HER, BECAUSE FOR ME IT'S TOO LATE

    THEN I HEARD GUNSHOTS GO OFF, ONE, TWO, THEN THREE
    AS I TOOK MY LAST BREATH IN LIFE, I LOOKED UP TO SEE
    THE MAN THAT ENDED MY LIFE, SHOT DEAD, FALLING ON TOP OF ME
    WITH A BULLET WOUND, TO HIS CHEST, HOW COULD THIS BE
    WITH TEARS IN HER EYES, MY CHILD WHISPERS, "MOM WE ARE FINALLY FREE"
    THE SMOKING GUN DROPS FROM HER HAND, AS ONE BULLET WENT IN HER AND THE OTHER IN ME
    THE SIN OF ONE, LIVED IN TWO, BUT DIED IN THREE

    IN THE MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT
    SILENTLY I SCREAMED, REALIZING THAT THIS DREAM COULD ONE DAY BE ME.



    © Copyright 2004 by FINDLOVEINME
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave:

    Nice intro....2 great poems. Glad you made it here. :spin:
     
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    this was very sad...
    very vivid and destriptive...
    you really brought the horrors of this across...

    good job...
     
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    This was a gripping tale, vividly written. The awful things that can happen when life spins out of control.
    You have a way of drawing your reader into the story.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome drop here u really did it up!

    don't forget to become a premium member
    and enjoy the full benefits as u support the community
     
  6. Lloyd

    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aww

    I can feel the hopeless n the pain through that!Itz really..DEEP n so truth!
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very deep
     
  8. Eric Mitchell

    Eric Mitchell Active Member MEMBER

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    Wow! I don't know what to say about this other than well done.
     
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    I got chills reading this. I was never in a physically abusive relationship, but I have been in one where things threatened at any moment to spiral out of control. This hit home for me. Very vivid.
     
  10. karamelqueen

    karamelqueen New Member MEMBER

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    wow that was deep kinda makes you think about what some people actually go threw. this is reality , and its sad. You wrote this really well maybe it can open some eyes, yanno.
     
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