Black Poetry : Silence

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  1. amberly

    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw lust
    walking by
    pen and pad in hand
    dreads bobbing to and fro
    with a look and smell
    of pure fineness

    an appearance of innocence
    with a taste of sin

    I unfolded the corners of his world
    to tiptoe inside
    relax on his mind
    dine on his time
    together we shared rhymes

    we made love from the back
    of each others thoughts
    sharing words of revelation
    syllables intertwined
    slowly grinding
    warm feelings from poets minds

    mellowed out
    smoking rolled up poetry
    elevating
    sky-scraping stars
    two neo soul spirits soaring
    through the cosmos

    erected
    he penetrated
    in and out of my attention
    instilling me with whispers
    until I screamed silence

    silence…
    was such a wonderful sound




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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was too tyte love the flow on dis here
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow that imagery is amazing....the whole [email protected] thing is amazing. good job
     
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    "whoa!"

    absolutely poetry!



    definitely
    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    wow this flow is tight
    wonderful just wonderful...
    loving your word usage :)
    Peace
    Blue:heart:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh, yes! This was on-- that imagery was vivid and on point. No silence for this piece...
    :bowdown:
     
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    Now that's the love that I'm diggin',
    Mentally vibin' off the spoken & written.

    Really nice piece.
     
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    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall, I appreciate your time
     
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