Black Poetry : Silence Filled

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  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she fills silence with everything
    click of nails
    hum of voice
    endless streaming words to
    fill your void
    she sees you cringe when she comments
    on television, newspaper
    books, movies
    she feels your exasperation
    in the tautness of your
    lips, slightly pursed and
    not opening
    you make her feel stupid
    unworthy of words
    undeserving of feelings
    she saunters to bed
    do you think she is tired

    Bull sh&t!
    all day, every day
    she is with child
    alone, life changed
    used to lockdown clubs
    party to 5
    work at 8
    day in, day out
    dollar short, but never late
    dozens of friends
    a couple of lovers
    now all alone
    they don't talk to
    one another.

    she loves this life
    don't get me wrong
    but we need companions
    to help us along
    someone to dream with
    who wants to share
    more than this child
    she needs you to care
     
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    I like this one a lot your word choice was nice and you conveyed what you meant to say very well.
     
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    peace,

    tyte scribe poet, well written.........
     
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    Life with a baby is wonderful, but it can also be lonely, such a huge change in priorities and all. Sometimes we just need someone to remind us that we are loved just for ourselves. You explained those feelings well.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully done poet love the drop here...............
     
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    i enjoyed this vibe....it was calm and gentle welcome back home

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    nice randee...
    i really understand this piece...(been there - done that)
    loved the title too...
    poetically clear and precise....very nice...
     
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