Quiet Poetry Lounge : side walk strokes

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by daroc, Apr 15, 2008.

  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    documenting cycles of life
    on paper with ink filled emotions
    historically,
    new to the art of me
    paintbrush strokes of images sweet like u
    framing words into hugs and kisses for me,
    expressing the art passionately,
    scenario similar to the past
    all but perfectly
    except this hope
    unwritten conclusion
    will seem to end differently...
    confirm the illusion of feelings masked
    by innocent
    matched with innocence
    leaving temptation and fear
    masters of destruction
    and love way to far behind
    with this new found ammunition
    with old wants for such end to the reign of lonely living
    ready for attack I stand
    open
    bulls eye
    on my chest
    targeted for all u have to give to me
    wishing no harm on either soul
    jus imprints mentally
    detaching my leaving from existence
    maneuvering my linguistics to include u in every sentence
    and happy after it
    flipping back pages of past entries
    rewriting poems to include
    the second coming
    yet I never had thought of such ever occurring
    and so these words work perfectly
    creating dreams from misery
    only to rework mysteriously...
    and so u have read pages inside
    leaving me speechless and blank
    and we write chapters alike
    connecting us despite whatever road we may take
    continuing to scribe words on my mind
    with your inner heart
    I have found solace in your sun set
    even when its dark
    attempting to document this moment
    in more than a text message
    capture this feeling
    from more than u will ever believe me
    wishing u understood all u are teaching me
    and so I stand wide open
    for comfort
    setting barriers for pain
    ignoring I am leaving
    wishing u here
    not far and between
    on a distant land walking on the red sea
    streaming the city
    searching for artistic influence
    ready to adapt words
    attach emotions and feelings
    documenting your history
    all I hope is it includes me.
    Presently
    futuristically
    Ever after....
    and happy.
    Listening to donuts.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    round and round this was outstanding i really love how u worded this joint
    it was like a venture and journey as i walk the path of this piece...keep it coming D.
     
  3. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    this is
    right

    on point... very beautiful!
     
  4. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS

    APPRECIATE THE LOVE FAM. THANKS
     
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    godsmantru Banned MEMBER

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    I feel inspired, this mix was just RIGHT!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so creative daroc, your words just open the mind up to life and love and just all sorts of possibilities. Great write.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    daroc:
    I really enjoyed the flow of this piece as
    well as the creative idea of the right margin.
    Very nice write indeed.

    Much Luv
     
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